BIRTHDAY PARTY

Darlene, with a pink bow in her hair, was spun round three times before she stumbled towards the donkey picture.

While everyone was distracted, Marcus and Tommy dipped their fingers into the cake icing and savoured the sweet sugar rush.

Penny stood by the railings in a huff after she had lost out on Pass The Parcel and Musical Statues. It was her birthday after all.

Michael sat in his car watching. He was sweating. He knew he was doing wrong. He knew he should just drive away. He knew he was evil. But the urge wouldn’t leave him alone.


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Copyright J Hardy Carroll

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.


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98 thoughts on “BIRTHDAY PARTY

  1. Creepy man, that last one.
    I hope he drives himself right into therapy.
    As for the kids–lovely description of a birthday party’s complex hierarchies and realities …
    UGH for the creep peep, though…

    Well written, Iain!

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  2. The birthday party was well described and the ending unexpected with an expert twist. I also hope Michael drives on by. A reminder we must always be on the guard for predators such as him. Great writing as always!

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  3. Hope the adults aren’t too distracted. Nice composition. Using first names to start each paragraph, you lull us into believing we are being told about children at the party, and then–BANG!

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