INTERVENTION

I was never a strong swimmer, unlike him, and he was stronger.

That’s why drowning him never appealed. Plus, I’d get my hair wet and my make-up would run.

But he did love the water, always at the pool, showing off his toned body and admiring the girls.

So it seems only right that I leave him there, floating face down, naked, blood seeping from the slit in his throat.

They’ll blame FiFi of course, a lover’s tiff. But that’s okay, I’ll be there to support her through it.

After all, that’s what best friends are for.


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Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

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93 responses to “INTERVENTION”

    1. Thank you so much 🙂

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  1. Oh, gosh, what a dark story. Great take on the photo prompt, Iain.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thank you Susan, yes, I gave in and just went with a dark one this week!

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  2. Yes, that’s exactly what the jealous best friend is for. Nicely done, Iain.

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    1. Always good to have someone watching your back…!

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  3. I do like this, Iain, especially the last line.

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    1. Thank you Roberta 🙂

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  4. She’s made a mistake. There’s too much self-congratulation here for her not to have

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    1. Next chapter sees the jaded detective arrive on the scene and spot something that doesn’t quite fit…

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  5. Love this twisty piece! Now I am curious as to how she did it.

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    1. Thank you Colline, I think there may have been some seduction involved – you have to use what talents you have 🙂

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  6. Buahahahaha… oh that little minx of a best friend!

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    1. Thanks Kevin, I wonder if she will remain a best friend for long…

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      1. And there’s the next adventure… “She didn’t appreciate what I did for her, so, I helped her understand as she lay there bleeding… I need a new best friend!”

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  7. Makes one wonder if he was stronger, how your MC managed to slit his throat and get him into the pool… since she didn’t want to get her hair wet 😉 Of course, she could have already been in the pool and it was just a question of getting close enough to him…

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    1. She may have used some seductive charms, he was very easily led… 😉

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      1. There is that…

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  8. Fifi, Iain, really?
    That made me laugh aloud, archetypal dumb blonde!

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    1. Stereotypes do help when you’ve only 100 words to play with 😉

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      1. It was wonderfully done!

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  9. Fifi, Bambi, Muffy, Fluffy or Buffy, you’ve made it plain that the guy was a player and his taste in women was dumb and sexy. Maybe he deserved to die, but I’m not sure Fifi deserves the consolation of his best “friend.”

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    1. What’s in a name, eh? Thanks Linda

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  10. Great little story here.

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  11. Oh wow! I think you’ve been hanging around with CE Ayr too long. Murder most foul.

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    1. He does rub off on you eventually, it’s so relentless 😉

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  12. Devious plan, although I don’t know if he’s thought it out too well. He might have to visit FiFi in prison after it’s all said and done. Nice piece.
    David

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  13. Yikes! Poor Fifi… sort of.

    Chilling tale that I would bet somewhere out there in the world isn’t entirely fiction!

    -Rachel

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    1. Friendships are complicated things! Thanks Rachel 🙂

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  14. Looks everyone’s got murder in his mind with this prompt.
    Excellent story, Kelly.
    That’s why drowning him never appealed. Plus, I’d get my hair wet and my make-up would run…
    nice reason provided for alternate course of action.

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    1. Have to take into account the practicalities. Thanks Neel

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  15. Love the casual voice of the narrator, Nicely done Iain.

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    1. Thanks Keith, she’s a casual kinda gal.

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  16. A clever, and darkly humorous piece, Iain. I’m FiFi has a good alibi.

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    1. If not, her best friend can provide her with one I’m sure. Thanks Russell

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  17. Chilling tale, Iain. Poor Fifi.

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  18. Watch out poor Fifi. If the cops don’t get you his best friend will. Loved it.

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    1. Yes, best to stay on the right side of her it seems!

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  19. Jealousy and unrequited love. Add to it the UberMe generation, and you got naked dead bodies in the pool.

    Bodies in the Pool. Interesting name for a band

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    1. Love can make all generations do crazy things! Thanks Stu 🙂

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  20. He sounds like a jerk… but maybe slicing his throat was a going a little bit too far.

    Snipping his “appendix” might have been better….

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    1. Bjorn, you have a twisted mind! 😉

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  21. Dear Iain,

    That was a totally twisted ending. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle, hope your trip is going well 🙂

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  22. Glad you’re not my best friend!!

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    1. You don’t need helping out like Fifi?

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  23. While I realize that water, in western culture, always has so represented the forces of evil (goes back to the days of the ancient Jews) , you all seem to find such nefarious misconduct in this prompt. Such an appropriate murder it was..roasting him upon his own pitard

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    1. There does seem to be a high body count this week!

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  24. he mustn’t have seen it coming. i wonder what he did or didn’t do to drive her crazy enough to kill him.

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    1. I think whatever it was, it existed more in her head than anywhere else.

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  25. We both went on a killing spree this week… Something about that water!

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    1. We’re not the only ones!

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      1. Good to share the feel good vibe!

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  26. Heaven forfend she should break a nail while slaughtering him.
    Poor FiFi. With best friends like this woman…

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    1. Not a broken nail, even worse!!

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  27. Angry jealous girlfriend! Should not have messed with her. Now you paid through you life.

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    1. I’m not sure he really deserved it 🙂

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  28. Love to know the back story on this one, Iain….

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    1. Thanks Violet, it involves teenagers in love 😉

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  29. A dark but good story, Iain. Great description. I could picture it. It sounds as though she doesn’t like FiFi much either. —- Suzanne

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    1. I don’t think it’s a true friendship. Thanks Suzanne

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  30. What a scoundrel he was! At least she didn’t get her hair wet and her make-up didn’t run. A dark story that made me chuckle. Well written and entertaining as always! =)

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  31. Ooooooo dark and moody. Love the imagery here. Fabulous piece.

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  32. And all the evidence washed away in chlorinated water!

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    1. Yep, no need to wipe the place clean 🙂

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  33. Creepily sinister — pity the poor pool attendants clearing up the blood !!

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    1. Bit of scrubbing, it comes off easy 😉

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  34. I’m not sure if I’m impressed or totally disturbed of the level of commitment she has to her friendship with FiFi. As always, well done!

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    1. She does take being friends seriously:-)

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  35. I guess best friends should share. I would run a mile and keep going to get away from her.

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    1. I guarantee she would track you down 🙂

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  36. If that’s her best friend behaviour, I wonder what she would do when angry?
    Seeing the blood count this week, I think it’s better to fill a pool with soil and having a garden bed instead.

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    1. Yes, it’s put me off swimming pools for a while, far too dangerous!

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  37. Good one.

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  38. She’s a devious one!
    Good portrayal.

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  39. I imagine her walking away from the bloody pool in high heels, with her hair dry and make-up intact, making her way to a nail appointment.

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  40. Quite a cool cucumber telling this tale. Her motivation is mysterious but her skill at overcoming obstacles, unquestionable.

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    1. She doesn’t let anything stand in her way, for sure.

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  41. whoa! Was he a player who came onto the best friend…I guess because he’s naked that must be the case. She boiling-rabbit crazy. Good one, Iain. Nice POV.

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    1. Unless of course she stripped him after the deed?! Thanks Sascha

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  42. That pool is ruined for everyone else too. Not nice!
    But great story 🙂

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  43. I liked the tempo best of all and I could picture the scene. The murderer’s name doesn’t bother me anywhere near what it did to the rest of your readers. But it does spur me to defend people who are judged by their names. Perhaps a story in less than 100 words…

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    1. What’s in a name after all? Thank you for reading 🙂

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