IAIN KELLY

THE DANCE

‘Yer gonna be late,’ his ma shouted at him from the kitchen.

‘Ahm jist tryin’ tae get masel’ lookin’ right, ma,’ he called back.

‘It’s too late fer that, son,’ she replied, ‘about fifteen years too late.’

She didn’t understand, this was the night he would ask Justine. He should have done it before now. He’d had five years of school together. He’d wasted two of them plucking up the courage to even talk to her.

After the summer she was leaving for university in the city. He would stay behind and start down the pit alongside his father and older brother. The chances of him ever escaping to the city were slim, so he had to ask her tonight.

He took a last look in the mirror, adjusting the stray bit of hair on his crown that always misbehaved. It would have to do.

‘You’ve nae chance,’ his brother said from the bed where he was lying reading the newspaper.

‘How wud you know?’ he asked angrily.

‘Ah’ve bin there. They wans that are aff tae the city wi’ big ambitions have got nae time fer the likes a’ us.’

***

As the sun went down behind the mist, he sat alone in the field and wiped away a tear.

He hated his brother for being right.


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Copyright Sue Vincent

This is a response to the #writephoto Prompt: Dance curated over at Sue Vincent’s Daily Echo. Click on the link to read other stories inspired by the image.


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34 responses to “THE DANCE”

  1. Eugenia Parrish Author Avatar

    Oh, this is a heartbreaker, and so real. I’ve been under the weather for a week and haven’t even tried to read anything, let alone write. But I’m glad I caught this one.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Eugenia, glad you caught it too. Hope you feel better soon.

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  2. Sue Vincent Avatar

    Ah, what a sad tale…but then, perhpas he is better off in the long run.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      We shall see! Thanks Sue

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      1. Sue Vincent Avatar

        🙂

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  3. magickmermaid Avatar

    Unrequited love is sad. But perhaps she wasn’t the right one for him. Hoping he will meet someone that appreciates who he is. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you 🙂

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  4. Meha Sharma Avatar

    Heartbreaking…
    On a different note, just wanted to tell you that I really admire you for being so consistent with your writing.Your passion for writing shines through. Lots to learn from you.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you so much Meha, that’s a lovely comment to receive 🙂

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  5. scr4pl80 Avatar

    That’s too bad. She probably wasn’t the right one for him anyway.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Let’s hope so. Thanks Janet

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  6. Sadje Avatar

    This is life! Good story

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      1. Sadje Avatar

        A pleasure

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  7. Lisa Coleman Avatar

    She would have broken his heart anyway. Better for him to find out now. Nice short!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Lisa

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  8. Diary of a Dublin housewife Avatar

    He’s better off without her. x Well done x

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  9. Diary of a Dublin housewife Avatar

    oh and aren’t brothers little shits at times, especially when they’re right…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
  10. OIKOSâ„¢-Publishing Avatar

    Lol -What a great answer to the prompt. Unique, but very heartbreaking. Thank you Iain, have a beautiful week ahead, and stay save. Michael

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Michael 🙂

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      1. OIKOSâ„¢-Publishing Avatar

        Thank you too, Iain! Have a beautiful day.

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  11. Woman walking Max Avatar

    Beautifully written, captures the sad truth that his heart’s desire will happen, he’s fixed in a society that will not let it. Love the last line : ‘he hated his brother for being right’. Well written.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks 🙂

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  12. willowdot21 Avatar

    Great story, they were obviously star crossed from the beginning!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you 🙂

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      1. willowdot21 Avatar

        It’s always a pleasure 💜

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  13. Michael Avatar

    Life can be cruel can’t it. Excellent story Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Michael – it certainly can.

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  14. joyroses13 Avatar

    Oh that is so sad! Tugs at the heart for him. You have such a way of putting such emotion into your writing that grabs the heart, and writing about things that aren’t so far fetched, even if we wish they were.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      So kind, thank you so much 🙂

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      1. joyroses13 Avatar

        You are very welcome. 🙂

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