IAIN KELLY

ALL GONE

They haven’t gone, the Christmas Angels.
They’re hiding from me.
Waiting. In the shadows.
Ready to step out into the twinkling lights.
Reflecting in the dirty puddles.
Shimmering and blurred.
Walking along the empty streets.
The closed shops, the dead cafés.
An open door.
Please sir, can you help me?
An inviting arm around my shoulder.
The warmth of the hallway.
Shut out the cold Eve.
His smiling face. My saviour.
A hot drink? Yes, please.
Christmas tree. Roaring fire. Twinkling lights.
Reflecting in the shiny blade.
I am your Christmas saviour, he says.
All gone. They are all gone.


Copyright Trish Nankivell

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays to you all. It’s been quite a year. Thank you as always to everyone who has stopped by, left comments and ‘likes’, taken an interest in my blog writing and especially those who have continued to take an interest in my novels. It is appreciated more than you can know! Stay safe everyone, and let’s all hope for the best in 2021. Iain.


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51 responses to “ALL GONE”

  1. Mister Bump UK Avatar

    Merry christmas to you, too, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you – hope you stay safe and well and enjoy the day.

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  2. Susan Eames Avatar

    Superbly atmospheric and thought provoking, Iain.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Susan.

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  3. Sandra Avatar

    Not perhaps the saviour he’d been hoping for, but looks like his suffering will soon be over. A sobering story that not all is what it may appear to be. Well done, Merry Christmas.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sandra. Merry Christmas.

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  4. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    Sounds like a bleak Christmas. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      A bleak end for a bleak year. Let’s hope for better. Thanks Rochelle.

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  5. neilmacdon Avatar

    Silent Night. Well done, Iain

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      That would have been a better title for it. Thanks Neil.

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  6. trishsplace Avatar

    Well done Iain. Merry Christmas, keep safe and bring on (please God) a better year in 2021.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Trish, Merry Christmas to you also. Take care.

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  7. may hem Avatar
    may hem

    I love how replacing shiny blade with almost any reflective surface (mirror, his eyes…) can totally change the story. Excellent. Happy holidays

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    1. Bernadette Braganza Avatar

      You’re right! I just went back and reread the story by switching the blade with another surface. Surprising how one word can turn a story from sinister to delightful 🙂

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      1. may hem Avatar
        may hem

        Or make it ambiguous… e.g. Hourglass. This idea can almost be turned into a writing prompt… Write a piece where changing one word changes the story

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    2. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Very true, although unfortunately in this case, it was definitely a shiny blade! 🙂

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  8. robbiesinspiration Avatar

    This is very sad, Iain. Merry Christmas to you and yours.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Robbie. It’s been a sad year all round. Merry Christmas to you also 🙂

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  9. Eugenia Parrish Author Avatar

    Oh, how sad. I was waiting for something better. Just like this whole year. This is a very affecting story that I won’t forget soon.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It’s the Christmas story 2020 deserves! Thank you, hope you have a Merry Christmas.

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  10. notestowomen Avatar

    Sad tale. Merry Christmas to you and yours, Iain 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Merry Christmas 🙂

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      1. notestowomen Avatar

        Thanks, Iain 🙂

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  11. ceayr Avatar

    A world of darkness behind your ‘twinkling lights’, Iain.
    Orrabest for Ne’erday

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks CE, hope you manage a good Christmas and New Year.

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  12. granonine Avatar

    “In the bleak midwinter. . . .”–the rest of that old Christmas carol doesn’t apply, but it’s the first thing that came to mind as I read your story 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It’s certainly bleak! Thanks Linda, Merry Christmas.

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      1. granonine Avatar

        Merry Christmas to you!

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  13. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    A blue Christmas – but I’m sure yours will be a colourful one, Iain!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Keith. Merry Christmas to you.

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  14. neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS Avatar

    Looks the pensive spirit has overtaken you, Ceayr. Hope for good tidings as they surely will come. Merry X-Mas.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Neel. Merry Christmas to you too.

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  15. msjadeli Avatar

    This year has twisted a lot of us and left a lot in dire straits. Sounds like this saviour has gone over the deep end. Covid incarnate 😦 May we all wake up from this bad dream in 2021.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      He’s not the only one to snap this year!

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  16. David Stewart Avatar

    Nice telling. I was getting a little suspicious of the guy by about halfway through. I see my instincts were right.

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  17. plaridel Avatar

    one little candle… it’s all we need to brighten the darkest night.

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  18. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar

    Oh, wow. I could FEEL that.
    Nicely spun.
    Merry Christmas Iain, and may the coming times brings good tidings to all.

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  19. Brenda's Thoughts Avatar

    His hopes of rescue from the bleakness were dashed. Sounds like the year 2020. Well written as always! I hope you and yours have a very Merry Christmas and that 2021 looks a lot different to this one.

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  20. justjoyfulness Avatar

    You sure led me up the garden path only to be disappointed. I was waiting for the Christmas angels to appear, not the Grim Reaper. Superbly told!

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  21. Tannille Avatar

    Sums up a Christmas to finish off 2020. Doesn’t feel very festive this year. A universal flat vibe.

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  22. bearmkwa Avatar
    bearmkwa

    Merry Christmas! I always enjoy reading your blog every week, especially so. Always a good story. Really like the depth of this poem, to0. It speaks much deeper of the reality this year. Happy new year, too, while I’m at it. ~ Shalom, Bear

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  23. liz young Avatar

    Your poem this week sent me back to read it again – always a good sign. Happy Christmas, Iain.

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  24. pennygadd51 Avatar

    Very impressive piece of work, Iain. Your writing is getting better and better. Kudos.

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  25. Michael Humphris Avatar
    Michael Humphris

    This flowed so well, until the cold steel.🙂 stay well.

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  26. draliman Avatar

    That didn’t seem to end too well for him. Happy holidays to you 🙂

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  27. Nobbinmaug Avatar

    I don’t know if that’s the saviour he was looking for. At least one of them got what they wanted for Christmas.

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  28. Girl in Niagara Avatar

    “Reflecting in the shiny blade.” Definitely chilling, takes the warmth out of those twinkling lights. Love your writing. Hope you had a wonderful holiday season Iain, and it was especially twinkly in a year that has gone awry.

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  29. jlennidorner Avatar

    I enjoyed the hope that lingers between the lines here. That they’re gone, but not really.

    I hope your New Year is going well. I only read and reviewed 23 books last year, but my goal for this year is 30. My other goals are to publish another fiction book in 2021, do the Blogging from A to Z Challenge in April, and increase the number of authors helped by Operation Awesome.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Lovely to hear from you! Good luck with your new year goals. If you’re struggling to find a book to review, I humbly offer my own novels!
      I’m hoping to have another book out at some point this year too, and do the A to Z as I’ve missed out in the last couple of years.
      If I was to read and review one of your books, which one do you recommend I should start with?

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