ALL GONE

They haven’t gone, the Christmas Angels.
They’re hiding from me.
Waiting. In the shadows.
Ready to step out into the twinkling lights.
Reflecting in the dirty puddles.
Shimmering and blurred.
Walking along the empty streets.
The closed shops, the dead cafés.
An open door.
Please sir, can you help me?
An inviting arm around my shoulder.
The warmth of the hallway.
Shut out the cold Eve.
His smiling face. My saviour.
A hot drink? Yes, please.
Christmas tree. Roaring fire. Twinkling lights.
Reflecting in the shiny blade.
I am your Christmas saviour, he says.
All gone. They are all gone.


Copyright Trish Nankivell

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays to you all. It’s been quite a year. Thank you as always to everyone who has stopped by, left comments and ‘likes’, taken an interest in my blog writing and especially those who have continued to take an interest in my novels. It is appreciated more than you can know! Stay safe everyone, and let’s all hope for the best in 2021. Iain.


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51 responses to “ALL GONE”

  1. Merry christmas to you, too, Iain.

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    1. Thank you – hope you stay safe and well and enjoy the day.

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  2. Superbly atmospheric and thought provoking, Iain.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  3. Not perhaps the saviour he’d been hoping for, but looks like his suffering will soon be over. A sobering story that not all is what it may appear to be. Well done, Merry Christmas.

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    1. Thanks Sandra. Merry Christmas.

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  4. Dear Iain,

    Sounds like a bleak Christmas. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. A bleak end for a bleak year. Let’s hope for better. Thanks Rochelle.

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  5. Silent Night. Well done, Iain

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    1. That would have been a better title for it. Thanks Neil.

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  6. Well done Iain. Merry Christmas, keep safe and bring on (please God) a better year in 2021.

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    1. Thanks Trish, Merry Christmas to you also. Take care.

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  7. I love how replacing shiny blade with almost any reflective surface (mirror, his eyes…) can totally change the story. Excellent. Happy holidays

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    1. You’re right! I just went back and reread the story by switching the blade with another surface. Surprising how one word can turn a story from sinister to delightful 🙂

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      1. Or make it ambiguous… e.g. Hourglass. This idea can almost be turned into a writing prompt… Write a piece where changing one word changes the story

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    2. Very true, although unfortunately in this case, it was definitely a shiny blade! 🙂

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  8. This is very sad, Iain. Merry Christmas to you and yours.

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    1. Thanks Robbie. It’s been a sad year all round. Merry Christmas to you also 🙂

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  9. Oh, how sad. I was waiting for something better. Just like this whole year. This is a very affecting story that I won’t forget soon.

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    1. It’s the Christmas story 2020 deserves! Thank you, hope you have a Merry Christmas.

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  10. Sad tale. Merry Christmas to you and yours, Iain 🙂

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  11. A world of darkness behind your ‘twinkling lights’, Iain.
    Orrabest for Ne’erday

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    1. Thanks CE, hope you manage a good Christmas and New Year.

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  12. “In the bleak midwinter. . . .”–the rest of that old Christmas carol doesn’t apply, but it’s the first thing that came to mind as I read your story 🙂

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    1. It’s certainly bleak! Thanks Linda, Merry Christmas.

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      1. Merry Christmas to you!

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  13. A blue Christmas – but I’m sure yours will be a colourful one, Iain!

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    1. Thanks Keith. Merry Christmas to you.

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  14. Looks the pensive spirit has overtaken you, Ceayr. Hope for good tidings as they surely will come. Merry X-Mas.

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    1. Thanks Neel. Merry Christmas to you too.

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  15. This year has twisted a lot of us and left a lot in dire straits. Sounds like this saviour has gone over the deep end. Covid incarnate 😦 May we all wake up from this bad dream in 2021.

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    1. He’s not the only one to snap this year!

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  16. Nice telling. I was getting a little suspicious of the guy by about halfway through. I see my instincts were right.

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  17. one little candle… it’s all we need to brighten the darkest night.

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  18. Oh, wow. I could FEEL that.
    Nicely spun.
    Merry Christmas Iain, and may the coming times brings good tidings to all.

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  19. His hopes of rescue from the bleakness were dashed. Sounds like the year 2020. Well written as always! I hope you and yours have a very Merry Christmas and that 2021 looks a lot different to this one.

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  20. You sure led me up the garden path only to be disappointed. I was waiting for the Christmas angels to appear, not the Grim Reaper. Superbly told!

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  21. Sums up a Christmas to finish off 2020. Doesn’t feel very festive this year. A universal flat vibe.

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  22. Merry Christmas! I always enjoy reading your blog every week, especially so. Always a good story. Really like the depth of this poem, to0. It speaks much deeper of the reality this year. Happy new year, too, while I’m at it. ~ Shalom, Bear

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  23. Your poem this week sent me back to read it again – always a good sign. Happy Christmas, Iain.

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  24. Very impressive piece of work, Iain. Your writing is getting better and better. Kudos.

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  25. This flowed so well, until the cold steel.🙂 stay well.

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  26. That didn’t seem to end too well for him. Happy holidays to you 🙂

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  27. I don’t know if that’s the saviour he was looking for. At least one of them got what they wanted for Christmas.

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  28. “Reflecting in the shiny blade.” Definitely chilling, takes the warmth out of those twinkling lights. Love your writing. Hope you had a wonderful holiday season Iain, and it was especially twinkly in a year that has gone awry.

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  29. I enjoyed the hope that lingers between the lines here. That they’re gone, but not really.

    I hope your New Year is going well. I only read and reviewed 23 books last year, but my goal for this year is 30. My other goals are to publish another fiction book in 2021, do the Blogging from A to Z Challenge in April, and increase the number of authors helped by Operation Awesome.

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    1. Lovely to hear from you! Good luck with your new year goals. If you’re struggling to find a book to review, I humbly offer my own novels!
      I’m hoping to have another book out at some point this year too, and do the A to Z as I’ve missed out in the last couple of years.
      If I was to read and review one of your books, which one do you recommend I should start with?

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