IAIN KELLY

UNREQUITED

She’s not in my orbit. She’s untouchable.

Would she be interested in a guy like me? Doubtful. I’m not one of the cool kids.

She doesn’t know I exist.

She doesn’t see me.

All I can do is watch from a distance.

Every night.

Until she draws her bedroom curtains.


Written for the Weekend Writing Prompt, hosted by SammiScribbles. This weekโ€™s prompt was: Orbit. Click on the link to read more stories by other writers.


31 responses to “UNREQUITED”

  1. Sadje Avatar

    Oh, I feel the pain of unrequited love.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      It happens to so many.

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Sadje Avatar

        Yes, indeed.

        Liked by 1 person

  2. tidalscribe Avatar

    Love the creepy last line.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yep, that’s what I was going for ๐Ÿ˜‰

      Like

  3. Yamini Ali MacLean Avatar

    Hari OM
    …yeah, that last line is a killer! YAM xx

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  4. Liz H Avatar

    Ew, creepy.
    Nice job, tho’.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Ew indeed! ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  5. Suzette Benjamin Avatar

    Well said and penned Iain. Thank you.๐Ÿ˜Š

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Suzette ๐Ÿ™‚

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  6. Dale Avatar

    Oh that peeping Tom! I wonder if she does know he is watching?

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Oh, that would be a good twist ๐Ÿ™‚

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Dale Avatar

        Ah hah! The plot could thicken ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  7. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar

    Oh, the poor yearner …
    And … just a tad creepy … ๐Ÿ˜‰
    Perhaps, instead of the unrequited
    They can mingle in friendlier pastures …

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yep, just a little bit creepy… probably best to avoid him!

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar

        Aha. Totally … ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  8. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    I trust you are not using a telescope!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Don’t be silly Keith, the binoculars will do the job!

      Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      He as some issues.

      Like

  9. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    I felt for him until the end. Then I shuddered. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Rochelle.

      Like

  10. Zelda Rene Avatar

    Oh this is a really good one–there’s nothing worse than unrequited love, in my book.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Zelda ๐Ÿ™‚

      Like

      1. Zelda Rene Avatar

        Most welcome.

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  11. Sunra Rainz Avatar
    Sunra Rainz

    A brilliant but creepy response to the prompt! A solid little short story ๐Ÿ™‚

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

      Liked by 1 person

  12. kimlhine Avatar
    kimlhine

    Yes creepy is a good description but l love it

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks ๐Ÿ™‚

      Like

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