INTERVENTION

Moonlight glinted off her pale body. The time for sacrifice was upon them. She squirmed and pulled against the ropes that bound her wrists and ankles.

A chant was intoned around her by the hooded wraith-like figures, gradually increasing in volume and intensity. The leader of the group, marked by his impressive horned headpiece stepped forward. He raised the jewel-encrusted dagger.

Just as he was about to plunge it into her exposed breast, our hero leapt from behind the wall which had hidden him and…

‘Archie, will you stop daydreaming and keep up. The guide is moving on.’

Archie sighed.


Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

67 responses to “INTERVENTION”

  1. I with Archie, dreams bring colour into life,

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    1. It passes the time at least.

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  2. Archie seems a little intolerant of other people’s faiths

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    1. 🙂 very true, let’s hope no Gods are angered!

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      1. No deities were injured in the making of this story

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  3. The daydream was way more interesting than the mundane reality

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    1. As is quite often the case! Thanks Sadje

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  4. Haha! Love the twist in this, well done.

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    1. Thanks so much Mason

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  5. Hari OM
    Everyone has their fantasies, I suppose!!! &*> YAM xx

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    1. Some are best left undescribed 😉

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  6. She is saved by intervention. Daydreaming is not always peaceful.

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    1. Very true, quite often the opposite!

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  7. Seamlessly told. A twist of the best kind 🙂

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      1. You’re welcome.

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  8. “Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night.” Edgar Allan Poe. Well done, Iain.

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    1. Great quote, thanks Bill

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  9. Well, for her sake, I am glad … 😉 For it seems she was saved …

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  10. Now, there’s a writer in the making!

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    1. He has the imagination for sure, but does he have the grammar?!

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  11. Everyone needs an Archie in their life. Lovely twist.

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  12. But history is so much more interesting! The tour guide can’t have been very good. Still, I daresay Archie’s wife is enjoying it.

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  13. I was about to comment that our “themes” were similar but then yours turned into daydreaming while mine stayed serial killer! 😅

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    1. Yes, fortunately mine was all imagination… this time!

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  14. Perhaps it was more than a daydream, a glimpse into a past unknown to others perhaps. On the other hand…!

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    1. I daresay there were sacrifices made!

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  15. Ah, enjoyed that twist at the end! Very nice.

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  16. Dear Iain,

    Another fantasy thwarted. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  17. Yes, we have our dreams don’t we.

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    1. Some more vivid than others!

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  18. HA HA … I chuckled at the end.
    I think his dream was a lot more fun.
    I loved the description of the headpiece.

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    1. Thank you, yes, imagined life is usually much more exciting than the real thing!

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  19. Great twist at the end. I was drawn into the description. You got me. Perhaps Archie could suggest some role play later assuming that was a wife or girlfriend who pulled him from his reverie.

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    1. Ha, I wonder if his wife would be up for playing the damsel! 🙂

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  20. Ah, to be Conan the Barbarian or one of his type (although Archie the Barbarian doesn’t have the same ring). 🙂

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    1. No, name change definitely needed to be a hero!

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  21. Oh gosh, you had me going! Good job on the twist and thankful that it was just crazy Archie

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      1. You are welcome! 😊

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  22. great imagination. he could be a best-selling author someday. 🙂

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    1. He’s got the ideas, but can he write? 🙂

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  23. I’m always shaken out of a daydream just as it’s about to get good, too 🙂

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    1. So frustrating! 🙂

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  24. An unexpected and very funny ending. What an imagination Archie has. I guess it’s more entertaining for him than the tour.

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  25. Archie’s really getting the whole experience here. The site itself draws him in. I think he’s having a better time than the rest of the tour group.Well told.

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  26. Give me a good daydream any day! Well done.

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  27. Good for Archie – what an imagination. Now, he needs to just type it all out. 😉

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  28. Ha! Great misdirect Iain… poor Archie. What a detailed imagination

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  29. This would make a great book opening. Excellent hook, until the end. Why is she being sacrificed? Who is saving her? So many questions. Excellent writing.

    I’m doing the #AtoZChallenge – writing a speculative fiction short story.
    On the main A to Z site today for “B” I shared a list of books. Check it out!
    At Operation Awesome we’re doing the A to Z Challenge and running a survey to pick the next Pass or Pages query contest genre.

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  30. Super interested in Archie’s version of the story ☺️ I really enjoyed reading this!

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