Iain Kelly

Fiction Writing

INTERVENTION

Moonlight glinted off her pale body. The time for sacrifice was upon them. She squirmed and pulled against the ropes that bound her wrists and ankles.

A chant was intoned around her by the hooded wraith-like figures, gradually increasing in volume and intensity. The leader of the group, marked by his impressive horned headpiece stepped forward. He raised the jewel-encrusted dagger.

Just as he was about to plunge it into her exposed breast, our hero leapt from behind the wall which had hidden him and…

‘Archie, will you stop daydreaming and keep up. The guide is moving on.’

Archie sighed.

Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

Iain Kelly

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67 responses to “INTERVENTION”

  1. Michael Avatar
    Michael

    I with Archie, dreams bring colour into life,

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      It passes the time at least.

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  2. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    Archie seems a little intolerant of other people’s faiths

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      🙂 very true, let’s hope no Gods are angered!

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      1. neilmacdon Avatar
        neilmacdon

        No deities were injured in the making of this story

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  3. pensitivity101 Avatar
    pensitivity101

    Like it!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  4. Sadje Avatar
    Sadje

    The daydream was way more interesting than the mundane reality

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      As is quite often the case! Thanks Sadje

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  5. Mason Bushell Avatar
    Mason Bushell

    Haha! Love the twist in this, well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks so much Mason

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  6. Yamini Ali MacLean Avatar
    Yamini Ali MacLean

    Hari OM
    Everyone has their fantasies, I suppose!!! &*> YAM xx

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Some are best left undescribed 😉

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  7. Vartika Avatar
    Vartika

    She is saved by intervention. Daydreaming is not always peaceful.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Very true, quite often the opposite!

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  8. magickmermaid Avatar
    magickmermaid

    Made me LOL!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Excellent! 🙂

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  9. scr4pl80 Avatar
    scr4pl80

    Cute!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Janet 🙂

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  10. msjadeli Avatar
    msjadeli

    Seamlessly told. A twist of the best kind 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you!

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      1. msjadeli Avatar
        msjadeli

        You’re welcome.

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  11. Bill Avatar
    Bill

    “Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night.” Edgar Allan Poe. Well done, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Great quote, thanks Bill

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  12. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar
    Na’ama Yehuda

    Well, for her sake, I am glad … 😉 For it seems she was saved …

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      🙂

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  13. Tannille Avatar
    Tannille

    Now, there’s a writer in the making!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      He has the imagination for sure, but does he have the grammar?!

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  14. Sandra Avatar
    Sandra

    Everyone needs an Archie in their life. Lovely twist.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Sandra

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  15. pennygadd51 Avatar
    pennygadd51

    But history is so much more interesting! The tour guide can’t have been very good. Still, I daresay Archie’s wife is enjoying it.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Penny

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  16. Stine Writing and Miniatures Avatar
    Stine Writing and Miniatures

    I was about to comment that our “themes” were similar but then yours turned into daydreaming while mine stayed serial killer! 😅

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Yes, fortunately mine was all imagination… this time!

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  17. Keith's Ramblings Avatar
    Keith’s Ramblings

    Perhaps it was more than a daydream, a glimpse into a past unknown to others perhaps. On the other hand…!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I daresay there were sacrifices made!

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  18. amiewrites74 Avatar
    amiewrites74

    Ah, enjoyed that twist at the end! Very nice.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks so much Amie

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  19. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Iain,

    Another fantasy thwarted. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Rochelle

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  20. Danny James Avatar
    Danny James

    Yes, we have our dreams don’t we.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Some more vivid than others!

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  21. Inside the Mind of Isadora Avatar
    Inside the Mind of Isadora

    HA HA … I chuckled at the end.
    I think his dream was a lot more fun.
    I loved the description of the headpiece.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, yes, imagined life is usually much more exciting than the real thing!

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  22. Nobbinmaug Avatar
    Nobbinmaug

    Great twist at the end. I was drawn into the description. You got me. Perhaps Archie could suggest some role play later assuming that was a wife or girlfriend who pulled him from his reverie.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Ha, I wonder if his wife would be up for playing the damsel! 🙂

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  23. David Stewart Avatar
    David Stewart

    Ah, to be Conan the Barbarian or one of his type (although Archie the Barbarian doesn’t have the same ring). 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      No, name change definitely needed to be a hero!

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  24. joyroses13 Avatar
    joyroses13

    Oh gosh, you had me going! Good job on the twist and thankful that it was just crazy Archie

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Ha, thank you! 🙂

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      1. joyroses13 Avatar
        joyroses13

        You are welcome! 😊

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  25. plaridel Avatar
    plaridel

    great imagination. he could be a best-selling author someday. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      He’s got the ideas, but can he write? 🙂

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  26. draliman Avatar
    draliman

    I’m always shaken out of a daydream just as it’s about to get good, too 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      So frustrating! 🙂

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  27. notestowomen Avatar
    notestowomen

    An unexpected and very funny ending. What an imagination Archie has. I guess it’s more entertaining for him than the tour.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you

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  28. Margaret Avatar
    Margaret

    Archie’s really getting the whole experience here. The site itself draws him in. I think he’s having a better time than the rest of the tour group.Well told.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Margaret

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  29. authorfleurl Avatar
    authorfleurl

    Give me a good daydream any day! Well done.

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  30. Patricia Clair Avatar
    Patricia Clair

    Good for Archie – what an imagination. Now, he needs to just type it all out. 😉

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you!

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  31. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Ha! Great misdirect Iain… poor Archie. What a detailed imagination

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you!

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  32. jlennidorner Avatar
    jlennidorner

    This would make a great book opening. Excellent hook, until the end. Why is she being sacrificed? Who is saving her? So many questions. Excellent writing.

    I’m doing the #AtoZChallenge – writing a speculative fiction short story.
    On the main A to Z site today for “B” I shared a list of books. Check it out!
    At Operation Awesome we’re doing the A to Z Challenge and running a survey to pick the next Pass or Pages query contest genre.

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  33. BriannaMarieWrites Avatar
    BriannaMarieWrites

    Super interested in Archie’s version of the story ☺️ I really enjoyed reading this!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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