CLIMAX

He was close. The big moment was coming.

They were covered in sweat, exhausted after two hours of constant exertion – it would all be worth it for the exultation that he was building up to.

He smiled at her and took in the scene, never wanting to forget it.

She looked back in wonder, puzzled at his brief hiatus from action.

The crowd parted around them, he took the ring from his pocket, glad that it had remained safe throughout the raucous concert.

‘Jolene, will you mar…’

Fireworks exploded, the mass jumped as one, she turned away, lost in her own passion. The ring disappeared.

Once again, he had mistimed the big climax.

Copyright Ted Strutz

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

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44 responses to “CLIMAX”

  1. They’ll look back one day and laugh at this. Though maybe not together

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    1. There’s only so much mistiming she will stand for. Thanks Neil

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  2. Missing the climax always sucks. 😀

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    1. For everyone involved 😉

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  3. Awww, poor guy. Hopefully he gets another chance. Great story!

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  4. Performance problems. One-in-five men, I hear. 😉

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    1. Depends who you ask, probably women would suggest a higher ratio 😉

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  5. Ayyy. Poor guy and the girl doesn’t have a clue what she missed.

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    1. Maybe it’s better that way, and he gets another chance.

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  6. Iain, I love the double entendre in this. It happens 🙂

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    1. It does 🙂 Thank you!

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      1. You’re welcome 🙂

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  7. Right place, wrong moment it seems. Time for plan B!

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    1. If he gets another chance – we’ll see!

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  8. Me feels a wee innuendo in this story. Maybe he’ll find the ring? But a day late and a dollar short. Seems he might not be the sharpest pencil in the box.

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    1. He certainly needs to up his game 😉

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  9. Oh dear. The master of the misstep! Poor guy has a romantic soul, but rotten sense of time and place.

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  10. Yikes, big mistake! Great post, Iain.

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  11. Aww! Poor guy! 😂

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    1. It happens to us all! 🙂

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  12. A total tease…the question is, did he ever tell her he lost the ring?

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    1. I doubt he would own up to it! 😉

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  13. Enjoyable story and I love the comments it inspired.

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    1. Thanks Dawn, I’ve enjoyed them too – those that get the innuendo, those that maybe get it but aren’t going to say anything, and the one or two that have clearly let it fly right over their heads! 🙂

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  14. Oh Lord! Poor chap – I hope they made up for it later.

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    1. Hopefully he gets another chance!

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  15. Bahahaha oh dear oh dear
    Hilarious moment, Iain.

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  16. Alana Mautone Avatar
    Alana Mautone

    Oops. Did he ever time it right with a new ring, or did he miraculously find the original one and propose after the concert? Did she say yes? Nicely done. Alana ramblinwitham

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  17. Oh NO! What a calamity and it seemed like the perfect moment too – good story Iain 😃

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  18. Dear Iain,

    I hope he can retrieve the ring. Damn the luck. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  19. Oh no, take about bad timing. I hope he can recover.

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  20. There’s nothing worse than an anti-climactic climax.

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    1. Tell me about it 😉

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  21. Ohhhhhh!! That would really rip your nightie! Bugger! That’s a lost climax to remember…

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