25

The plant pot lay in pieces on the pavement.

Iain lay unconscious beside it.

He should’ve paid more attention.

Lady Wisoff-Fields claimed it was accidental.

 


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© Roger Bultot

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above). Last week I overstepped the word limit. As penance, as an apology and out of respect, I offer only 25 words this week to redress the balance. Thanks to Sandra Crook for the original suggestion!

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

98 responses to “25”

  1. Love it, love it! 🙂 Complete story arc, stunning plot, paucity of prose. Gold star performance.

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    1. 🙂 thanks Sandra. I rather enjoyed having only 25 words to use, certainly makes for a clinical edit.

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  2. Best flash fiction I have read this week , very good

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    1. Ha, thanks Joy, high praise indeed 🙂

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  3. Well played, sir. As full as it was brief.

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  4. Oh! this was outstanding Lain, even by your standards.

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    1. Thank you Neel, maybe I should stick to 25 words each week?! 🙂

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  5. Less than a drabble, less than a dribble, and yet still I saw the detective with his waxed mustachios and the assembled guests in the drawing room

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    1. Thanks Neil, I’m glad it conjured up this image 🙂

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  6. Dear Iain,

    It was an accident! I swear it! You did it! My hat’s off to you, sir. I laughed out loud! Bravo!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle, glad I raised a smile this week to make up for last week. Lesson learned, Iain 🙂

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      1. And you did it brilliantly. 😀

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  7. well you sure did a lot with 25 words – and of course it was an accident… ha!

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  8. The aftermath of a silent movie! It’s all fun and games until someone loses an eye. 😉

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  9. Ah!! Great job! Less, can sometimes be so much more 🙂 The words had just the right impact.

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    1. Thanks Joy, very true 🙂

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  10. Excellent write. Reminds me of 33 word trifecta challenge.

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  11. Wonderful in its brevity. Funny in its ending!
    I giggled away!
    Awesome!

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    1. Many thanks, much appreciated 🙂

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  12. HAHAHAHAHAHA!!! You appeased the Purple Goddess. All depart.

    As for her modus operandi, I usually just get slapped in the face. Never a vase. Then again, there’s always a first time …

    Five out of five “calla lilies are in bloom again.” 😀

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    1. Thank you, biggest laugh of the day so far. She appears to be appeased, I can sleep again at last. 🙂

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  13. Good one, loved it! Accidental my ***. LoL! Great story.

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    1. Thanks, that’s her story and she’s sticking to it! 🙂

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      1. giggles…

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  14. Loved the 25 word response/story. Rochelle and I both got a kick out of it. You will fit in well with all the witty followers here. Well done.

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    1. Thanks Jan, glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  15. So, you are your own victim?

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    1. It’s good to kill yourself off once in a while. always to reappear later on of course!

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  16. Ha! That’s great Iain! A full story in 25 words – brilliant. Now, if we only knew where to find the killer … 🙂

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    1. Thanks Lynn, I wonder where she could be 🙂

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    Wow and I thought 100 words was a challenge.

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    1. In some ways it was easier – there aren’t too many choices to make!

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  18. Ian, you should not do gardening on the windowsill… love the story.

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  19. Delighted that you lived to tell the tale after your ‘accident!’

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  20. Boom! Great job, Iain! I love how you retaliated and frankly, you told a whole story in one quarter of the words… Hmmmm… 😉

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  21. Ouch! I hope you come round in time for next weeks story!

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    1. Tune in to see if I make it 🙂

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      1. I’ll be first in the queue!

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  22. pure genius. the best this week.

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    1. Very kind, thank you!

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  23. Clever response, and very funny too! Not sure I’d believe this “accident” story, but maybe you’d better, just to keep the peace. 😉

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    1. Best to keep quiet and carry on as though nothing happened now 😉

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      1. Good plan. I won’t mention it to anyone. 😉

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  24. Ha ha! You actually did write a mini-story, and a great one too 🙂

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    1. Many thanks, I do feel like I’ve achieved something! 🙂

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  25. Absolutely brilliant. I really did laugh when I read it!

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    1. Thanks Clare, glad it’s giving everyone a little chuckle 🙂

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  26. This was brilliant Iain! Simple and clever and you still managed to tell a full story 🙂

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    1. Thanks Jade really appreciate your comment 🙂

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  27. Oh, Dear! Well done. I bet Rochelle laughed when she read that you punished yourself. 🙂

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    1. She seemed to enjoy it 🙂

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  28. Short but oh so clever! Well told. Loved this

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    1. Thanks Laurie, glad you liked it 🙂

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  29. I guess I’ll have to watch that word count carefully. I don’t want to “accidentally” follow the flower pot (and you) out of that window… Nice piece of penance.

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    1. Thanks Trent, yeah, I wouldn’t advice going over the word limit! 🙂

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    Overstepping word counts are one thing….did you have to kill yourself too?? 😉
    – Lisa

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    1. Only I’m fiction thankfully, I can rewrite myself alive next week 🙂

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  31. Well played, Iain. A masterpiece in brevity. My hat’s off to you.

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  32. I suspect that it twas no accident. That’s what happens when you go over the word limit 😉 (altho I am one of the worst offenders!)

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    1. I won’t tell anyone 😉

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  33. … and now you’ve proved you can do it – clever boy! 100 words next time?

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    1. I think I’ll go for 100 words exactly from now on! Thanks Liz 🙂

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  34. Haha! that’ll teach you, you won’t be naughty again.

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    1. Thanks Michael, a lesson for everyone 🙂

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  35. A superb story. I loved it. Well done, Iain!

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  36. Redeemed you are! Now I have to go back to last week and see what I missed! Nice job, in 25 clever words. 🙂

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  37. Although I’ve not had time to participate in FF this week, I just had to see what you’d written for your 25-word penance! Rochelle told me it was brilliant, and I agree 😀

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    1. Thanks Sarah, I really appreciate you reading and the compliment. I think I’m back in the good books for now 🙂

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  38. I was a little confused for a moment but the back story made it clear. This is superb! lol

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  39. That was great, Iain, and truly classic. Agatha Christie couldn’t have done better. It was also hilarious. 😀 — Suzanne

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    1. Thanks Suzanne, high praise indeed 🙂

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  40. Oh I loved this Iain brilliant.
    🙂
    🙂

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    1. Thanks, a bit of fun that has gone down well 🙂

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  41. Absolutely brilliant!

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