25

The plant pot lay in pieces on the pavement.

Iain lay unconscious beside it.

He should’ve paid more attention.

Lady Wisoff-Fields claimedย it was accidental.

 


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ยฉ Roger Bultot

Written as part of theย Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more detailsย HERE).ย The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above). Last week I overstepped the word limit. As penance, as an apology and out of respect, I offer only 25 words this week to redress the balance. Thanks to Sandra Crook for the original suggestion!

To read stories of 100 words based on this weekโ€™s prompt, visit HERE.

98 responses to “25”

  1. Love it, love it! ๐Ÿ™‚ Complete story arc, stunning plot, paucity of prose. Gold star performance.

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    1. ๐Ÿ™‚ thanks Sandra. I rather enjoyed having only 25 words to use, certainly makes for a clinical edit.

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  2. Best flash fiction I have read this week , very good

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    1. Ha, thanks Joy, high praise indeed ๐Ÿ™‚

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  3. Well played, sir. As full as it was brief.

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  4. Oh! this was outstanding Lain, even by your standards.

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    1. Thank you Neel, maybe I should stick to 25 words each week?! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  5. Less than a drabble, less than a dribble, and yet still I saw the detective with his waxed mustachios and the assembled guests in the drawing room

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    1. Thanks Neil, I’m glad it conjured up this image ๐Ÿ™‚

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  6. Dear Iain,

    It was an accident! I swear it! You did it! My hat’s off to you, sir. I laughed out loud! Bravo!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle, glad I raised a smile this week to make up for last week. Lesson learned, Iain ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. And you did it brilliantly. ๐Ÿ˜€

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  7. well you sure did a lot with 25 words – and of course it was an accident… ha!

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  8. The aftermath of a silent movie! It’s all fun and games until someone loses an eye. ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  9. Ah!! Great job! Less, can sometimes be so much more ๐Ÿ™‚ The words had just the right impact.

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    1. Thanks Joy, very true ๐Ÿ™‚

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  10. Excellent write. Reminds me of 33 word trifecta challenge.

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  11. Wonderful in its brevity. Funny in its ending!
    I giggled away!
    Awesome!

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    1. Many thanks, much appreciated ๐Ÿ™‚

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  12. HAHAHAHAHAHA!!! You appeased the Purple Goddess. All depart.

    As for her modus operandi, I usually just get slapped in the face. Never a vase. Then again, there’s always a first time …

    Five out of five “calla lilies are in bloom again.” ๐Ÿ˜€

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    1. Thank you, biggest laugh of the day so far. She appears to be appeased, I can sleep again at last. ๐Ÿ™‚

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  13. Good one, loved it! Accidental my ***. LoL! Great story.

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    1. Thanks, that’s her story and she’s sticking to it! ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. giggles…

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  14. Loved the 25 word response/story. Rochelle and I both got a kick out of it. You will fit in well with all the witty followers here. Well done.

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    1. Thanks Jan, glad you enjoyed it ๐Ÿ™‚

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  15. So, you are your own victim?

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    1. It’s good to kill yourself off once in a while. always to reappear later on of course!

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  16. Ha! That’s great Iain! A full story in 25 words – brilliant. Now, if we only knew where to find the killer … ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thanks Lynn, I wonder where she could be ๐Ÿ™‚

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  17. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover Avatar
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    Wow and I thought 100 words was a challenge.

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    1. In some ways it was easier – there aren’t too many choices to make!

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  18. Ian, you should not do gardening on the windowsill… love the story.

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    1. Thanks Bjorn ๐Ÿ™‚

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  19. Delighted that you lived to tell the tale after your ‘accident!’

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  20. Boom! Great job, Iain! I love how you retaliated and frankly, you told a whole story in one quarter of the words… Hmmmm… ๐Ÿ˜‰

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    1. Thanks Dale ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  21. Ouch! I hope you come round in time for next weeks story!

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    1. Tune in to see if I make it ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. I’ll be first in the queue!

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  22. pure genius. the best this week.

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    1. Very kind, thank you!

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  23. Clever response, and very funny too! Not sure I’d believe this “accident” story, but maybe you’d better, just to keep the peace. ๐Ÿ˜‰

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    1. Best to keep quiet and carry on as though nothing happened now ๐Ÿ˜‰

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      1. Good plan. I won’t mention it to anyone. ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  24. Ha ha! You actually did write a mini-story, and a great one too ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Many thanks, I do feel like I’ve achieved something! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  25. Absolutely brilliant. I really did laugh when I read it!

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    1. Thanks Clare, glad it’s giving everyone a little chuckle ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thanks Louise ๐Ÿ™‚

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  26. This was brilliant Iain! Simple and clever and you still managed to tell a full story ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thanks Jade really appreciate your comment ๐Ÿ™‚

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  27. Oh, Dear! Well done. I bet Rochelle laughed when she read that you punished yourself. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. She seemed to enjoy it ๐Ÿ™‚

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  28. Short but oh so clever! Well told. Loved this

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    1. Thanks Laurie, glad you liked it ๐Ÿ™‚

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  29. I guess I’ll have to watch that word count carefully. I don’t want to “accidentally” follow the flower pot (and you) out of that window… Nice piece of penance.

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    1. Thanks Trent, yeah, I wouldn’t advice going over the word limit! ๐Ÿ™‚

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    Overstepping word counts are one thing….did you have to kill yourself too?? ๐Ÿ˜‰
    – Lisa

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    1. Only I’m fiction thankfully, I can rewrite myself alive next week ๐Ÿ™‚

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  31. Well played, Iain. A masterpiece in brevity. My hat’s off to you.

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  32. I suspect that it twas no accident. That’s what happens when you go over the word limit ๐Ÿ˜‰ (altho I am one of the worst offenders!)

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    1. I won’t tell anyone ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  33. … and now you’ve proved you can do it – clever boy! 100 words next time?

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    1. I think I’ll go for 100 words exactly from now on! Thanks Liz ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Many thanks ๐Ÿ™‚

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  34. Haha! that’ll teach you, you won’t be naughty again.

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    1. Thanks Michael, a lesson for everyone ๐Ÿ™‚

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  35. A superb story. I loved it. Well done, Iain!

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    1. Thanks Edith ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thanks Sascha ๐Ÿ™‚

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  36. Redeemed you are! Now I have to go back to last week and see what I missed! Nice job, in 25 clever words. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thanks Dawn ๐Ÿ™‚

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  37. Although I’ve not had time to participate in FF this week, I just had to see what you’d written for your 25-word penance! Rochelle told me it was brilliant, and I agree ๐Ÿ˜€

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    1. Thanks Sarah, I really appreciate you reading and the compliment. I think I’m back in the good books for now ๐Ÿ™‚

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  38. I was a little confused for a moment but the back story made it clear. This is superb! lol

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  39. That was great, Iain, and truly classic. Agatha Christie couldn’t have done better. It was also hilarious. ๐Ÿ˜€ — Suzanne

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    1. Thanks Suzanne, high praise indeed ๐Ÿ™‚

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  40. Oh I loved this Iain brilliant.
    ๐Ÿ™‚
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    1. Thanks, a bit of fun that has gone down well ๐Ÿ™‚

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  41. Absolutely brilliant!

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