IAIN KELLY

CONNECTION

He found the phone booth that would provide a secure landline connection.

He punched in the number. Two rings and a click.

‘Danny?’ Her voice was tired.

‘Did you do it?’ he asked. He pictured the blood-spattered body.

‘I had orders.’

‘I have to come after you.’

‘I’ll guess I’ll be seeing you.’ The line went dead.

Danny slammed the receiver down. She had promised she was finished.

He walked back to the apartment and turned on his smartphone. His location would be revealed immediately, the microphone would be recording. He dialled the office.

‘Detective Thompson. Senator Carmichael is dead.’


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Copyright J Hardy Carroll

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

Although this stands alone as a piece of intrigue, in my mind it is a sort of sequel to a previous Friday Fictioneers story which you can find here: HAPPY NEW YEAR.

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

90 responses to “CONNECTION”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar

    Satisfyingly complex, Iain. It extends well beyond the 100 words

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Neil, there is a longer story kicking about there if I can ever nail it down and write it. Glad that you sense that too.

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  2. gravadee Avatar

    Im curious. What happens then?
    What did that call say…
    Awesome read

    Click Here to see what Mrs. Dash Says

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, definitely room to continue this story!

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  3. Jane Dougherty Avatar

    This is as complex as any thriller I’ve ever watched! Then what?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Jane – I’m glad it seems to be intriguing people – now I just have to write the long version of what happens next.

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      1. Jane Dougherty Avatar

        That could turn into a much longer project! Good luck 🙂

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  4. Sandra Avatar

    Intriguing, both episodes.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sandra.

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  5. joyroses13 Avatar

    Hmmm….. great lead in to a bigger story (hopefully) 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      One day (hopefully). Thank you.

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  6. Martin Cororan Avatar
    Martin Cororan

    There’s nothing worse than a hit-woman lying about being retired!

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  7. Patrick Prinsloo Avatar

    Gripping tale, but no denouement which is desperately needed. Please!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Patrick – I’ll need to think of one now…

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  8. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Iain,

    Sounds like the beginning of a longer political thriller. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Rochelle

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  9. J Hardy Carroll Avatar

    Hoped he wiped off the receiver! Nicely told

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  10. Kelvin M. Knight's blog Avatar

    A microcosmic story macrocosmic in its telling. Great prose.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Kelvin

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  11. Moon Avatar
    Moon

    I admire the versatility of your themes and how effortlessly you alter and match-up .
    Great story!

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  12. ceayr Avatar

    Tightly written, intriguing piece. Loved it up to the last line then wondered if the names were significant?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      In all honesty, I haven’t thought far enough ahead to tell whether they’re significant names of not. There was no intention to relate to anything else… at the moment. Thanks CE

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  13. Annie Avatar

    Shades of Det. Sand’s adventure! It would be a great story to be immersed in!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Annie – so nice you remembered Det. Sand. Definitely in the same mould.

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      1. Annie Avatar

        I “spent” a month with him and looked forward to his next move each day – he was pretty unforgettable 🙂

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  14. Rowena Avatar

    I can see this expanding into a great story. Well done.
    xx Rowena

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  15. James Avatar

    Yet another challenging murder mystery. You should become a crime writer.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks James – if only someone would pay me to do just that 😉

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      1. James Avatar

        I know the feeling.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Liz, I’m encouraged by everyone’s comments. There’s a much longer story there to write 🙂

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  16. k rawson Avatar

    Intriguing story–there were so many ways to take this. Well told!

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  17. Kalpana Solsi Avatar

    Read your earlier post ,’Happy New Year’.
    a well crafted political thriller. Can I expect a continuation to this interesting story?
    http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/07/the-sunday-call.html

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks, possibly could do. I think it could be the spark for a novel length story.

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  18. Eva Blaskovic Avatar

    As always, nice writing and dialogue.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Eva 🙂

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  19. Sascha Darlington Avatar

    This is intriguing! I agree with Neil. I would love to read more!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks for the encouragement Sascha

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      1. Sascha Darlington Avatar

        You’re very welcome! Please let us know if you do write further on it.

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  20. Varad Avatar

    A detective and a hitgirl. A potent mix made exclusively for explosive romance. Great write up, Iain. I’m with the majority in suggesting that you expand on this one.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Varad – think I’m going to have to get writing this now!

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  21. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    Excellent, Iain! I have to agree, nice and tight and goes well with the first chapter or on its own. Loved it.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Dale, always appreciated 🙂

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  22. Christine Goodnough Avatar

    A good “bad” scene, compact and well executed — pardon the pun.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Christine

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  23. draliman Avatar

    Sounds like he’s quite tight with the hit woman, but he still has his job to do. Nice one!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Yep, he’s in a tight spot. Thanks.

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  24. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    A juicy snippet from an intriguing tale. You never fail to enthral Iain!

    Click to read my FriFic

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Very kind Keith.

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  25. wmqcolby Avatar

    Wow, Iain! Touch and go! I’m just wondering how this will work out. Good intrigue. Any plans for it?

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Certainly seem to be a lot of comments asking for more – stay tuned!

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  26. ayushm1000 Avatar

    Interesting! You should expand this story.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, definitely a possibility.

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  27. Lynn Love Avatar

    Well, that’s a complicated relationship they’ve got going on there! Unsustainable, I’d say. Intriguing tale, Iain and I liked your sparse, cut back language, fitting for a thriller scenario. Nicely done

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  28. pennygadd51 Avatar

    Great story, beautifully written. I’m fascinated by what he might see in her – and she in him – and how on earth they’ll be able to maintain a relationship. My money’s on him turning bad…

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Ye of little faith! I think he will try to save her rather than go bad himself… maybe!

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      1. pennygadd51 Avatar

        Reminds me of Carmen and Don Jose…

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  29. Liz Young Avatar

    An entire first chapter in 100 words!

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  30. rgayer55 Avatar

    Tightly written, Iain. A great opening page for a novel. 5 stars.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, just have to write the rest of it now…

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  31. granonine Avatar

    Wow. Lots of intrigue going on with that phone!

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  32. Laurie Bell Avatar

    Ooooo so layered! I’m fascinated. Yes write more i say

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Laurie, I’m working on it 🙂

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  33. plaridel Avatar

    i think there’s more to the story than meets the eye. for instance, why didn’t he call office using the landline?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Certainly a lot to be revealed.

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  34. lingeringvisions by Dawn Avatar

    Lots of intrigue in this one. I tensed up while reading it.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Dawn, that’s a good reaction to a thriller!

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  35. Courtney Wright Avatar

    Never knew who was on the other end before smart phones and called I’D. A mystery… good take!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Courtney

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  36. Sandra Conner Avatar

    Yes, as was stated above — you must continue this story and give us some resolution.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sandra, I will try my best!

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  37. Natasha Avatar
    Natasha

    Plot to a bigger story. Very nicely done. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Natasha

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  38. Sarah Ann Avatar
    Sarah Ann

    That’s the problem when assassins/ members of the security services have relationships with each other. So much is hinted at here, giving us chapters not just 100-words.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sarah Ann, lots of good feedback inspiring me to write more about these characters.

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      1. Sarah Ann Avatar
        Sarah Ann

        I’ll look forward to more then.

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  39. justjoyfulness Avatar

    Do I read romance between the lines? Very taut little thriller!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you, definitely some connection between them.

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  40. Sarah Potter Writes Avatar

    Interesting … I’m reading that he has a soft spot for her, or at least a sneaking admiration, assassin that she is!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thanks Sarah, definitely something going on there.

      Liked by 1 person

  41. Helen Vahdati Avatar

    I agree with others here that there was so much between the lines, it kept you thinking long after it was finished. I enjoyed it!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Thank you Helen, very kind.

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  42. subroto Avatar

    She is not a one hit wonder then? Intriguing story, waiting for the sequel.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar

      Seems like she has done it before. Thanks.

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      1. gahlearner Avatar
        gahlearner

        Oh, twisty and very intriguing. I’d love to read more, too. Great writing.

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