Archie sat in the small boat. ‘Is that it? We’ve hardly got out of the bay. You didn’t even put the sail up.’
‘No wind in the bay for that,’ the boat owner answered.
‘Well, I haven’t found anything luxurious about my cruise at all.’
‘I’m sorry you feel that way, although as you’ve had the full hour, I can’t offer you a refund.’
Archie jumped over the side and landed in the shallow sea, soaking his shoes and trousers. He trudged up the sandy beach to where Agnes was sitting. She peered at him over the top of her book. ‘Well, how was it?’
‘Splendid. you would have enjoyed it,’ Archie replied through gritted teeth.
A tanned, young man walked passed. He gave Agnes a wave. She waved back with a beaming smile.
‘Who’s that?’ Archie asked.
‘The hotel masseur, Ricardo,’ Agnes replied, picking up her book once more. ‘I decided to treat myself to a little bit of luxury too.’
Archie removed his shoes and began scraping the wet sand from his feet.
Written as part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The challenge is to write a flash fiction story in around 150 words, based on the weekly photo prompt. Thanks as always to the challenge host Priceless Joy. For more information visit HERE.
To read other stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.
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Hahaha. Poor Archie! Awesome story, Iain.
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Thanks Moon, he’ll get over it 🙂
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Agnes turned out smarter and enjoyed to the hilt. the idea of luxury varies with each person.
neat story.
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Thank you
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Ha ha ha…poor Archie… Agnes had a better time…great take on the prompt and you painted the images beautifully lain.
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Thank You Trina 🙂
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I could totally imagine this happening.
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Uh oh! Archie better watch out. Good one, Iain
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Thanks Varad
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Haha! A thoroughly enjoyable read. I’ll be sure to check out other Agnes and Archie stories.
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Thank you, I hope you enjoy them all as much 🙂
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Fun has different flavors for man and woman.
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Hahahaha! Good for Agnes! I’m sure Archie was a little jealous. Great story, Iain!
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I think he realised he made the wrong choice – but he won’t admit it! Thanks PJ
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Yes, so true! LOL!
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Lol
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Pretty funny. Wonder if the masseuse and the boat owner had a plan…
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Now that would be very devious of them!
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🙂
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I’m sure I’ve been in similar situations. Great story
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Thanks!
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This is a good one! I’m glad Agnes treated herself too!
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Thank you 🙂
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Archie had better be careful, Ricardo has to much charm.
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I don’t think he has to worry, at least not once the holiday is over. Until then….
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Luxury can be such a subjective thing can’t it…good tale Iain..
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True. I enjoy the idea of being on a sailboat, bobbing around on the quiet sea – in reality it’s a lot of hard work to sail!
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A series! I like it, Iain!
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Thanks Rosemary, a couple of characters that are always floating around and occasionally crop up in these little snippets.
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Hahaha! Lovely story. Enjoyed reading this!
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Thank you so much.
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haha she must have enjoyed showing of her good time
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Thank you
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🙂 So well written, Iain. I’m just sorry Archie’s experience wasn’t what he expected…not that he’ll ever tell Agnes
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He would never admit it to her 🙂
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Delightful Iain!
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Thanks Keith
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Funny story! At the expense of poor Archie, though. Not so great at picking out luxuries, it seems. My guess is that he didn’t listen to his wife, and that he should, next time! 🙂
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You think he would learn 🙂
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Haha, I wonder if Agnes is putting up a front the same as Archie? But her time doesn’t seem as disappointing… fun story!
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I think Agnes was more than happy with her luxury treat! Thanks for reading.
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I keep thinking of Ben Stiller in that movie, Along Came Polly. His wife ends up hooking up with “happy as a hippo” Claude on their honeymoon.
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Good point, I hadn’t thought of that, but now you mention it…!
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Sounds like he’d not the greatest person. And she…. wandering a bit…..
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Thanks for reading. They do love each other, but have been together so long that they love and irritate one another! A few of the other stories help to see their relationship.
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I’ll keep an eye out for the other stories.
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Archie would be wise to check with Agnes and see what she considers fun and enjoyable….I’m sure his time would not be wasted if he did. 🙂 Love this story!
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Ha, there’s a thought!
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I enjoyed the juxtaposition of Archie and his wife. His grande ‘cruise’ didn’t go so well but his wife had a wonderful massage. I can’t blame her 🙂
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Thanks Mandi 🙂
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I almost feel sorry for Archie. He seems cross while Agnes got the better end of the luxury.
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Hopefully the rest of his holiday will be better! Thanks
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