THE ENEMY WITHIN

‘This is Mount Lemmon Observatory calling, is there anyone receiving?’

Only static hiss replied.

Marshall rubbed his sweat-stained forehead.

‘Can anyone update us? What has happened?’

The static noise stopped. Dead silence.

Marshall maneuvered the telescope with the controls. He tilted it down to face the horizon.

Outside he saw bare, dead trees and barren sandscapes.

He had spent his life gazing at the heavens, searching for signs of life and guarding against hostile projectiles.

Meanwhile the real threat to Earth had already been here, and now his search was for any sign of life on his own planet.


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Copyright Jan Wayne Fields

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

This April I am taking part in the A to Z Challenge once again. My theme is a collection of stories from around the countries of the European Union, and you can find them here: A TO Z CHALLENGE 2018

108 responses to “THE ENEMY WITHIN”

  1. EM pulse? A severe enough solar flare would knock out communications, though people wouldn’t necessarily die.

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    1. Could be, unspecified at this moment until he learns more.

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  2. Dear Iain,

    A bleak tale that has me wondering what planet Marshall is from. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. Dear Iain,
    A real sense of mystery in this one. Intriguing.
    How are you going with the challenge? I’m writing to Leonardo Da Vinci today. It was a public holiday for ANZAC Day today so not very productive on the writing front. My husband had a dummy spit. Always happens during the A-Z Challenge. Wish you could get paid for going into this thing so I could better justify my efforts on the home front.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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    1. I agree, I keep getting told off from my kids to get off the computer! Almost there, I have written all but my last entry, so I think I shall make it to the end. Must pop over and read Da Vinci, I have always been fascinated by him and his work.

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      1. I have only managed to scratch the surface, I’m afraid but I’ll be working on these and taking more time. I do want to learn more about Leonardo, especially his curiosity. Definitely something in that. My daughter has always asked a lot of questions like that and I’ve just been grateful that I’ve had Google to help with the answers.

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      2. Tried to leave a comment on your Da Vinci post but something seemed to go awry. I have visited Milan, Florence and the Louvre so have followed his life around a bit, endlessly fascinating, both his art, inventions and the man himself.

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      3. Thanks Iain.
        I’ll have to see what’s going on with my comments. That sounds a bit strange. I haven’t been to Milan, but my cousin is currently there on a cello scholarship. It would be great to head back to Europe but there’s a lot here in Australia yet to explore which I can do on my current budget.
        Best wishes,
        Rowena

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  4. Good story, Iain. ET Phone home!

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  5. A sad ending. Nice take.

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  6. Lain, you have a since surprise for us every week 🙂 I wasn’t sure where this one was going at first, but it soon became clear. Great take on this prompt.

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    1. Thank you, good to know I can still find something original to say 🙂

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  7. Yikes! Reminds me of War of the Worlds.

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  8. Good chiller, Iain. There may be signs of life, but is any of it intelligent?

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    1. Not from where I’m looking…

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  9. He was always looking up when he should have been looking around him – a kind of analogy for many of us there, always looking around when what we really have is right here. Nice tale Iain

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    1. Thank you Lynn, glad you saw the point I was trying to suggest. A few comments suggest something extra-terrestrial was involved, which I hadn’t intended!

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      1. I didn’t see little green men. Just human folly! My pleasure Iain

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  10. A timely allegory to remind us of the need to take care of our planet. The threats that could wipe out humanity are already present. We can see them if we open our eyes and our minds. But will we open our hearts and do anything effective about them?
    A great cautionary tale.

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    1. Thank you Penny – exactly, we already know the threats that might wipe us out, but are we doing enough to prevent it, and if not, why not?

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  11. This hits very close to home, Iain. A great story.

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  12. I agree with Lynn. Sometimes we are so focused on one thing, we forget to see what is happening around us. Nicely told.

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  13. I’m thinking we have met the enemy and he is us. Our biggest threat is ourselves. If only we can win that battle, everything else should be easy.

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    1. Wouldn’t it just. Apparently we’re quite a stubborn enemy though, and unwilling to change our ways.

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  14. How do you manage writing posts for 2 different challenge. You are amazing. Here I keep struggling every day post .

    #atozchallenge – Journey So Far

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    1. I have to organise my time very carefully! Keep going, the end is in sight 🙂

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  15. I sometime wonder, if over time those who inhabit planets destroy them, perhaps we are in danger of becoming the last in a very long line to do so..

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    1. It certainly seems to be our aim at the moment.

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  16. A post-apocalyptic world. I’ve seen movies like that. Nicely done. 🙂

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  17. Oh, I wasn’t expecting that! Great story, Iain.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  18. The future looks bleak, doesn’t it? You captured very well the subtle desperation.

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    1. There is still hope at the moment that we can turn it around.

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  19. I think this is something that has been at the back of our minds of late – and wonder how much the world will know when someone presses a button somewhere. This line says it all “Outside he saw bare, dead trees and barren sandscapes.” I wonder if he does come across life whether they will wish they had perished also.

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    1. That’s true, who would want to live in a world like that? Thanks Irene.

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  20. Entirely too realistic.

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  21. I, too, became focused on the looking up instead of directly in front or down… Perfect description of today’s society…
    Scary thought.

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  22. I hope this does not turn out to be prescient Iain, the way things are going.

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  23. i suppose that due to climate change, earthlings are forced to live underground to survive the extreme heat.

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    1. Could be one solution.

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  24. Could he be the last survivor, all alone on top of the mountain? A scary thought.

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    1. Would you want to be that person?

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  25. I too think the enemy is us. We make such brilliant progress and improvements alongside idiotic waste of resources and downwright cruelty. A good, thought-provoking story, Iain.

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    1. Thanks Jilly, we do so much good and then seem to self destruct…

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  26. We know the enemy – it is us. Well written.

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    1. Our own worst enemy.

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  27. If it’s intelligent life forms he’s looking for, I suggest he go back to looking at the stars.

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    1. Don’t give up hope just yet Jane!

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  28. That last paragraph rings so true. Nice one.

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    1. Thank you, how is your A – Z coming along?

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      1. So slow, too many distractions. Only reached ‘S’ (for slow).

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  29. Looks like one was resistant to my super-virus after all. 😉 I like how you set his star-gazing in contrast to events around him. A good reminder not to forget about the bigger picture.

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    1. Thank you, not sure he wants to be the lone survivor!

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  30. Oh! Such a sad state of affairs…. Almost seems like a prediction. 😦

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  31. Uh-oh! What was the threat?! Great job!
    -AshleyDannie-

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  32. The destruction of the earth is a slow-train coming, but coming none the less. Tightly written.

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    1. Thanks Russell – we seem to be doing all we can to arrive early at our destination.

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  33. Sooooo good. Great story. One I hope doesn’t come to pass

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    1. Thank you Laurie – me too!

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  34. Bad things always happen when you’re looking the other way. You leave us wanting to know more about what happened to put Marshall intros position – a story to continue thinking about.

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  35. Another post-apocalyptic dystopia. You are full of the joys of spring here, Iain!

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    1. It’s looking sunnier here today, if it holds until next week I’ll do a happy story…but this is the west coast of Scotland.

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  36. All alone… happening while you’re busy looking elsewhere… chilling.

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    1. It’s not a nice place to be.

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  37. This could be an all too real scenario you’ve set up for us this week. Definitely a scary prospect… in many realms. Great write!

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  38. Gorgeously mysterious.

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  39. Great story – scary and sad. Hope this is just a dream.

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  40. What a scary position to be in!

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    1. You don’t fancy it?

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  41. A fantastic reminder, that what we have should not be taken for granted.

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    1. Absolutely, thanks James

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  42. So often we are so focused on the distant we neglect to notice what’s happening on our doorstep

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    1. Not seeing the wood for the trees is a popular pastime.

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  43. An excellent, chilling story! Watching the heavens, “guarding against hostile projectiles”, forgetting the place he was to protect. =)

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    1. Exactly, and the threats closer to home. Thanks Brenda

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  44. I like how the story suggests we focus more on saving our planet instead of flying to Mars and starting colonies on other planets.

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    1. I would be good if we got our own house in order first, wouldn’t it!? Thanks Fatima

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      1. Only makes sense 🙂

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  45. I suppose it is human nature to worry more about the improbably than our own messes. Well done, Iain.

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  46. I like where you went with the pic; a timely warning of the damage the human race have managed to inflict on the planet

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  47. Oh, the irony! Great use of suspense. I wonder what will become of him.

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  48. How sad that he missed it all. Well, not sad that he didn’t die, but that he didn’t have a chance to maybe help the human race survive.

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    1. If there are any other survivors, perhaps he will still get that chance!

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  49. The irony is …well, ironic.

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  50. […] story, but the prompt photo fitted neatly into a continuation. You can read the first part here: THE ENEMY WITHIN, or enjoy it as a stand alone story in its own […]

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