INTERVENTION

I was never a strong swimmer, unlike him, and he was stronger.

That’s why drowning him never appealed. Plus, I’d get my hair wet and my make-up would run.

But he did love the water, always at the pool, showing off his toned body and admiring the girls.

So it seems only right that I leave him there, floating face down, naked, blood seeping from the slit in his throat.

They’ll blame FiFi of course, a lover’s tiff. But that’s okay, I’ll be there to support her through it.

After all, that’s what best friends are for.

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

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93 responses to “INTERVENTION”

Sneha Ganesh

15/05/2019

Oh my! This is great

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thank you so much 🙂
  
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Susan A Eames

15/05/2019

Oh, gosh, what a dark story. Great take on the photo prompt, Iain.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thank you Susan, yes, I gave in and just went with a dark one this week!
  
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Varad

15/05/2019

Yes, that’s exactly what the jealous best friend is for. Nicely done, Iain.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Always good to have someone watching your back…!
  
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robertawrites235681907

15/05/2019

I do like this, Iain, especially the last line.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thank you Roberta 🙂
  
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neilmacdon

15/05/2019

She’s made a mistake. There’s too much self-congratulation here for her not to have

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Next chapter sees the jaded detective arrive on the scene and spot something that doesn’t quite fit…
  
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Colline

15/05/2019

Love this twisty piece! Now I am curious as to how she did it.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thank you Colline, I think there may have been some seduction involved – you have to use what talents you have 🙂
  
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What Words May Come

15/05/2019

Buahahahaha… oh that little minx of a best friend!

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thanks Kevin, I wonder if she will remain a best friend for long…
  
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  1. What Words May Come
    
    15/05/2019
    
    And there’s the next adventure… “She didn’t appreciate what I did for her, so, I helped her understand as she lay there bleeding… I need a new best friend!”
    
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Dale

15/05/2019

Makes one wonder if he was stronger, how your MC managed to slit his throat and get him into the pool… since she didn’t want to get her hair wet 😉 Of course, she could have already been in the pool and it was just a question of getting close enough to him…

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  She may have used some seductive charms, he was very easily led… 😉
  
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  1. Dale
    
    15/05/2019
    
    There is that…
    
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ceayr

15/05/2019

Fifi, Iain, really?
That made me laugh aloud, archetypal dumb blonde!

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Stereotypes do help when you’ve only 100 words to play with 😉
  
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  1. ceayr
    
    15/05/2019
    
    It was wonderfully done!
    
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granonine

15/05/2019

Fifi, Bambi, Muffy, Fluffy or Buffy, you’ve made it plain that the guy was a player and his taste in women was dumb and sexy. Maybe he deserved to die, but I’m not sure Fifi deserves the consolation of his best “friend.”

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  What’s in a name, eh? Thanks Linda
  
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J Hardy Carroll

15/05/2019

Great little story here.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thank you
  
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Sandra

15/05/2019

Oh wow! I think you’ve been hanging around with CE Ayr too long. Murder most foul.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  He does rub off on you eventually, it’s so relentless 😉
  
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David Stewart

15/05/2019

Devious plan, although I don’t know if he’s thought it out too well. He might have to visit FiFi in prison after it’s all said and done. Nice piece.
David

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thanks David
  
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Rachel Bjerke

15/05/2019

Yikes! Poor Fifi… sort of.

Chilling tale that I would bet somewhere out there in the world isn’t entirely fiction!

-Rachel

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Friendships are complicated things! Thanks Rachel 🙂
  
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neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS

15/05/2019

Looks everyone’s got murder in his mind with this prompt.
Excellent story, Kelly.
That’s why drowning him never appealed. Plus, I’d get my hair wet and my make-up would run…
nice reason provided for alternate course of action.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Have to take into account the practicalities. Thanks Neel
  
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Keith’s Ramblings

15/05/2019

Love the casual voice of the narrator, Nicely done Iain.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thanks Keith, she’s a casual kinda gal.
  
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Russell Gayer

15/05/2019

A clever, and darkly humorous piece, Iain. I’m FiFi has a good alibi.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  If not, her best friend can provide her with one I’m sure. Thanks Russell
  
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notestowomen

15/05/2019

Chilling tale, Iain. Poor Fifi.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thank you 🙂
  
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JoHawkTheWriter

15/05/2019

Watch out poor Fifi. If the cops don’t get you his best friend will. Loved it.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Yes, best to stay on the right side of her it seems!
  
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StuHN

15/05/2019

Jealousy and unrequited love. Add to it the UberMe generation, and you got naked dead bodies in the pool.

Bodies in the Pool. Interesting name for a band

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Love can make all generations do crazy things! Thanks Stu 🙂
  
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

15/05/2019

He sounds like a jerk… but maybe slicing his throat was a going a little bit too far.

Snipping his “appendix” might have been better….

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Bjorn, you have a twisted mind! 😉
  
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rochellewisoff

15/05/2019

Dear Iain,

That was a totally twisted ending. Well done.

Shalom,

Rochelle

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  Thanks Rochelle, hope your trip is going well 🙂
  
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Create Space

15/05/2019

Glad you’re not my best friend!!

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  You don’t need helping out like Fifi?
  
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larry trasciatti

15/05/2019

While I realize that water, in western culture, always has so represented the forces of evil (goes back to the days of the ancient Jews) , you all seem to find such nefarious misconduct in this prompt. Such an appropriate murder it was..roasting him upon his own pitard

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  15/05/2019
  
  There does seem to be a high body count this week!
  
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plaridel

16/05/2019

he mustn’t have seen it coming. i wonder what he did or didn’t do to drive her crazy enough to kill him.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  16/05/2019
  
  I think whatever it was, it existed more in her head than anywhere else.
  
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Tannille

16/05/2019

We both went on a killing spree this week… Something about that water!

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  16/05/2019
  
  We’re not the only ones!
  
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  1. Tannille
    
    17/05/2019
    
    Good to share the feel good vibe!
    
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draliman

16/05/2019

Heaven forfend she should break a nail while slaughtering him.
Poor FiFi. With best friends like this woman…

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  16/05/2019
  
  Not a broken nail, even worse!!
  
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Abhijit Ray

16/05/2019

Angry jealous girlfriend! Should not have messed with her. Now you paid through you life.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  16/05/2019
  
  I’m not sure he really deserved it 🙂
  
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Violet Lentz

16/05/2019

Love to know the back story on this one, Iain….

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  16/05/2019
  
  Thanks Violet, it involves teenagers in love 😉
  
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patriciaruthsusan

16/05/2019

A dark but good story, Iain. Great description. I could picture it. It sounds as though she doesn’t like FiFi much either. —- Suzanne

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  16/05/2019
  
  I don’t think it’s a true friendship. Thanks Suzanne
  
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Brenda’s Thoughts

16/05/2019

What a scoundrel he was! At least she didn’t get her hair wet and her make-up didn’t run. A dark story that made me chuckle. Well written and entertaining as always! =)

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  16/05/2019
  
  Thank you Brenda
  
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Laurie Bell

16/05/2019

Ooooooo dark and moody. Love the imagery here. Fabulous piece.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  16/05/2019
  
  Thanks Laurie
  
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Danny James

17/05/2019

FFF for sure.

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Liz Young

17/05/2019

And all the evidence washed away in chlorinated water!

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  19/05/2019
  
  Yep, no need to wipe the place clean 🙂
  
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Woman walking Max

17/05/2019

Creepily sinister — pity the poor pool attendants clearing up the blood !!

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  19/05/2019
  
  Bit of scrubbing, it comes off easy 😉
  
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Jewel Ingalls

17/05/2019

I’m not sure if I’m impressed or totally disturbed of the level of commitment she has to her friendship with FiFi. As always, well done!

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  19/05/2019
  
  She does take being friends seriously:-)
  
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James McEwan

18/05/2019

I guess best friends should share. I would run a mile and keep going to get away from her.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  19/05/2019
  
  I guarantee she would track you down 🙂
  
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subroto

18/05/2019

If that’s her best friend behaviour, I wonder what she would do when angry?
Seeing the blood count this week, I think it’s better to fill a pool with soil and having a garden bed instead.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  19/05/2019
  
  Yes, it’s put me off swimming pools for a while, far too dangerous!
  
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Bear

18/05/2019

Good one.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  19/05/2019
  
  Thank you
  
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Dawn M. Miller

18/05/2019

She’s a devious one!
Good portrayal.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  19/05/2019
  
  Thanks Dawn
  
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magarisa

18/05/2019

I imagine her walking away from the bloody pool in high heels, with her hair dry and make-up intact, making her way to a nail appointment.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  19/05/2019
  
  Exactly 🙂
  
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4963andypop

19/05/2019

Quite a cool cucumber telling this tale. Her motivation is mysterious but her skill at overcoming obstacles, unquestionable.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  19/05/2019
  
  She doesn’t let anything stand in her way, for sure.
  
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Sascha Darlington

22/05/2019

whoa! Was he a player who came onto the best friend…I guess because he’s naked that must be the case. She boiling-rabbit crazy. Good one, Iain. Nice POV.

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  22/05/2019
  
  Unless of course she stripped him after the deed?! Thanks Sascha
  
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Enkin Anthem

23/05/2019

That pool is ruined for everyone else too. Not nice!
But great story 🙂

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  23/05/2019
  
  Thank you 🙂
  
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kzmcb

31/05/2019

I liked the tempo best of all and I could picture the scene. The murderer’s name doesn’t bother me anywhere near what it did to the rest of your readers. But it does spur me to defend people who are judged by their names. Perhaps a story in less than 100 words…

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1. Iain Kelly
  
  03/06/2019
  
  What’s in a name after all? Thank you for reading 🙂
  
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