SHE DID SEE

Go back to nature, they said. Rediscover yourself. Rediscover the true meaning of life.

If the true meaning of life was to be covered in mosquito bites, sweat and dirt, then she’d struck gold. Right now, she was dreaming about her cosy apartment, a glass of wine and the latest Stranger Things series.

‘What’s that noise?’ she shouted to the guide ahead. All week she’d suffered his contempt. He must hate city slickers.

‘You’ll see,’ he said, pushing foliage out the way. The rumbling got louder until they stepped into a clearing.

And she did see.

Copyright Dave Stewart

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read more stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

I was delighted to receive the author copies of my new novel ‘The Barra Boy’ from my publisher this week. If any of my Friday Fictioneer colleagues, or anyone else, are interested in receiving a copy, all the details can be found HERE.

69 responses to “SHE DID SEE”

  1. Hari OM
    I have actually bush-bashed in such places – mossies are one thing, the leeches were quite another. I don’t recall once wishing for wine or television… a long luxurious shower, maybe… &*> YAM xx

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  2. Very nicely written, Iain. Despite the fact that the photoprompt gives the game away, you succeed in maintaining and increasing the emotional tension for the the reveal. Skilfully done!

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  3. That waterfall! Totally worth the pains it took to get there.
    Her apartment, wine, & TV will still be there on her return…
    Unless the guide tips her onto the rapids…Lol!

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  4. True to life. Often, there’s a great struggle to achieve that goal even if it’s just a bit of piece. The guide knew that in the end, she’d find it worth the effort. Congratulations on receiving the copies of your novel!! I look forward to reading it.

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  5. I do relate to your lead here. I hate mosquitoes!! Worst creatures in existence (and I live in Aus! Haha) still I think we all stop and stare in awe at the majesty of a waterfall.

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  6. She’s not an outdoors girl, obviously. I can relate to that. I like the ending – I’m thinking her discomfort and irritation will all disappear when she steps into the clearing. That would be quite a sight. I like how you’ve developed this – it takes us right along with them on their trek.

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