SHE DID SEE

Go back to nature, they said. Rediscover yourself. Rediscover the true meaning of life.

If the true meaning of life was to be covered in mosquito bites, sweat and dirt, then she’d struck gold. Right now, she was dreaming about her cosy apartment, a glass of wine and the latest Stranger Things series.

‘What’s that noise?’ she shouted to the guide ahead. All week she’d suffered his contempt. He must hate city slickers.

‘You’ll see,’ he said, pushing foliage out the way. The rumbling got louder until they stepped into a clearing.

And she did see.

Copyright Dave Stewart

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read more stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

I was delighted to receive the author copies of my new novel ‘The Barra Boy’ from my publisher this week. If any of my Friday Fictioneer colleagues, or anyone else, are interested in receiving a copy, all the details can be found HERE.

69 responses to “SHE DID SEE”

  1. I empathize with your protagonist 🙂 I prefer closed, comfy spaces to mosquito-ridden open areas.

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    1. To be honest, so do I! But I wouldn’t mind a bit of adventure now and then! 🙂

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      1. We go for planned adventures rather than real ones. And companies in the leisure business are minting money 🙂

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      2. The tourist industry is a big earner – as the pandemic showed when it stopped!

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  2. And, I hope, it made all the discomfort worthwhile

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    1. I would like to think that view would be worth her while. Thanks Neil.

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  3. Another great take Iain. Good luck with the book!

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    1. Thank you Di. Hope you will find time to give it a read 😉

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  4. Hari OM
    I have actually bush-bashed in such places – mossies are one thing, the leeches were quite another. I don’t recall once wishing for wine or television… a long luxurious shower, maybe… &*> YAM xx

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    1. 🙂 Hopefully she got to shower in the waterfall! 🙂

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  5. Dear Iain,

    I’m guessing she’s not seeing an escape from her “adventure.” You had me smacking mosquitos. 😉 All the best on your book.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle, I think for her it’s turned into an ordeal rather than adventure!

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  6. Gotta love a happy ending 🙂

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    1. It’s nice to write one now and then 🙂

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  7. Definitely worth a little discomfort to see this waterfall. Best wishes for your new book!

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    1. Thank you! Hope you will be able to have a read of it 🙂

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  8. Very nicely written, Iain. Despite the fact that the photoprompt gives the game away, you succeed in maintaining and increasing the emotional tension for the the reveal. Skilfully done!

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    1. Thanks Penny 🙂

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  9. That waterfall! Totally worth the pains it took to get there.
    Her apartment, wine, & TV will still be there on her return…
    Unless the guide tips her onto the rapids…Lol!

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    1. He may just about have had enough of her moaning! 🙂

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  10. Some things are worth the inconvenience. Such a realistic and well-told story, Iain.

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    1. Thank you, I agree, a few days discomfort now and then is worth it to see what nature has to offer.

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      1. You’re welcome.

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  11. Beautiful. I prefer cosy places without mosquitos too. 😉 xx Michael

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    1. Thanks Michael 🙂 Can’t tempt you with a once in a lifetime trip? 🙂

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  12. I think our protagonist is the same girl. 😊 Thanks for the tour. (Swats a mosquito.)
    Tracey

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    1. Thanks Tracey – heading over to see what she’s been up to in your story now! 🙂

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  13. The most hardened city-slicker couldn’t fail to be in awe of that – or could they? Nice one Iain.

    Btw, I had a lovely evening at the Glasgow Royal Concert Hall on Saturday!

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    1. Thanks Keith. How nice, what did you see? I haven’t been since pre-Covid times, must get back there. Usually end up at the Christmas concert there most Decembers!

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      1. I saw the RNSO, the principal flautist Katherine Bryan is my daughter’s bestie, and she was premiering a piece specially written for her. Went to the Killearn beer festival too!

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      2. Sounds like an excellent weekend! 🙂

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  14. Nice story, some people need to be shaken to open their eyes.

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    1. They certainly do. Thanks for reading

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  15. as seasoned travelers would say, if it’s not to your liking, change your liking. otherwise, don’t travel at all. 🙂

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    1. Yes, maybe she has learned to just stay home, or maybe the waterfall will convince her it was worth it!

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  16. And now to find out if she thought it was worth the mosquito bites.

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    1. That is the question. Thanks Frank.

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  17. Love it. Sometimes the journey can be worth the end.

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  18. This reminds me of descriptions of jungles from aircraft (or pictures) versus being on the ground in the midst of it all. Well played, Iain.

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    1. Thanks Bill, much appreciated

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    I felt like I was right next to her, sweaty and hearing the roar of the waterfall. So nicely done.

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  20. Brilliant, you make the picture the second part of your story. No more words needed. And if a view like that doesn’t induce awe in her, nothing will.

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    1. Thank you. Yes, if that view doesn’t work, then nothing will!

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  21. True to life. Often, there’s a great struggle to achieve that goal even if it’s just a bit of piece. The guide knew that in the end, she’d find it worth the effort. Congratulations on receiving the copies of your novel!! I look forward to reading it.

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    1. I meant “peace.” (haha)

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    2. Thanks Brenda, look forward to hearing what you think of it. Let me know if I can help get a copy to you!

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      1. Thanks Iain. What is the best way to get a copy?

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      2. Where are you based at the moment? It might be easiest for me to send you a copy. If you email me at iainkellywriting@outlook.com I can look at the best way 🙂

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  22. I do relate to your lead here. I hate mosquitoes!! Worst creatures in existence (and I live in Aus! Haha) still I think we all stop and stare in awe at the majesty of a waterfall.

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    1. Thanks Laurie 🙂

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  23. Overload of sight and sound. Nature at its finest.

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  24. Great work, Iain. I kind of felt a little guilty as I would also be whining about mosquitoes and bugs. But it would be worth it to see this.

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    1. Thanks so much 🙂

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  25. She’s not an outdoors girl, obviously. I can relate to that. I like the ending – I’m thinking her discomfort and irritation will all disappear when she steps into the clearing. That would be quite a sight. I like how you’ve developed this – it takes us right along with them on their trek.

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  26. All is well that ends well. Good one

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  27. This made me laugh – very good!

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  28. I think the trip has just taken a huge turn for the better.

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    1. Agreed, thanks Sandra

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