A MEMORABLE MOMENT

Archie stood contemplating the winter sun set.

‘What a lovely moment,’ Archie sighed.

‘If you say so,’ said Agnes, shivering and stamping her cold feet. ‘Can we go now?’

‘We could just cross the river here rather than walking all the way back to the bridge,’ Archie suggested. The water level was low.

Before Agnes could object, he jumped down from the bank.

There was a squelch as his feet and legs disappeared into the mud.

He clambered back onto the bank, sodden, and without his wellies.

‘Now that was memorable moment,’ Agnes said, as she started walking along the path.


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Copyright Roger Bultot

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

Read more from Agnes and Archie here: THE AGNES AND ARCHIE STORIES.

**Wellies elsewhere in the world sometimes known as rain boots or rubber boots**

115 responses to “A MEMORABLE MOMENT”

  1. The eternal confrontation between dreams and reality

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    1. Reality always gets in the way. Thanks Neil.

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  2. Always wise to test the water before jumping in feet first! A sobering lesson when you lose your wellies too! Nice tale Iain

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  3. Hah! I don’t suppose that was what he intended!

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    1. It never quite works out for him. Thanks Claire.

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  4. still kind of fun to have tried…. (towel anyone?)

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  5. This sounds oh so familiar 🙂

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      1. True! So true. A relatable, lovely tale.

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  6. With the amount of misadventures these two keep having, guess they should take a break on taking a break 😉

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    1. They always manage to get themselves into these silly situations.

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  7. Dear Iain,

    Agnes seems a bit of cynic with a dry sense of humor. I like her. 😉 Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. She is exactly that Rochelle 🙂

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  8. Never jump in feet first! You should always test the water!

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  9. Nice take on the prompt. Pretty sure you could save a word with “sunset” if you needed to 😉

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    1. Funny you should pick up on that, I debated ‘sun set’ or ‘sunset’. To me they represent 2 slightly different meanings. Fortunately I was 100 words exactly, so didn’t need to compromise!

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      1. To have the verb clearly understood, you could say “Sun setting” in any case Archie will clearly understand the old idiom, “fools rush in.” 😁

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      2. Thanks Christine – you think Archie would learn and heed the idiom 🙂

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  10. Poor Archie, but I did have to laugh! Good story!

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    1. Thank you Joy. Archie will look back and laugh about it too I’m sure!

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  11. Funny, Iain!
    As the song says ‘If it wisnae fur yir wellies, where wid ye be’…

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  12. Not one of Archie’s finer moments to be sure.

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    1. Just the latest in his catalogue of mishaps.

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      1. I was trying to remember some of the Archie stories and it seems to me that this is about on par for the course, no? And of course he didn’t listen to Agnes, because what fun would that have been? Her reaction was the best part, though!

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      2. There is a definite trend for Archie doing something a bit silly in these stories, part of his charm.

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      3. I get the feeling that the more Agnes nags him to stop it, the more silly he’ll get. 😉

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  13. Wellies. I luv’m

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    1. Just coming into Wellie season too!

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  14. Agnes and Archie are quite a couple. I can almost hear Agnes’ patient smirk. Lightly told, Iain, and entertaining.

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    1. Thank you Kelvin, they certainly keep me entertained 🙂

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  15. Very amusing. These are great characters!

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    1. Thank you Clare – I enjoy writing them and spending time with them 🙂

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    I hope that they were not Hunters wellies.

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    1. If they were he may stay and try and retrieve them from the mud!

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  17. Great couple this Agnes and Archie. Love reading their adventures in life.

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    1. Thanks Janet, I enjoy writing about them 🙂

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  18. The dream, the dream-catcher and reality. Nicely done Iain!

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  19. Seemed like a good idea at the time.

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    1. They always do at first.

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  20. Squelching is not lovely. 😉
    Funny one!

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  21. Losing my shoes like that is so totally something I would do.

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  22. My first response… “Fool, serves you right.” Then, I just cracked up laughing. 🙂 Love it. BTW, I think there’s still a pair of 1972 era correctional shoes, braces still attached floating somewhere beneath the Brent Spence Bridge over the Ohio river…if anyone finds them, please return to me…

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    1. Ha, there’s a story we’d like to hear! 🙂

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  23. I hope you don’t mind a bit of critique. You could save a few words by omitting “Archie sighed.” It unneccessary as the words follow his actions. And one more word could be gained by changing ‘If you say so,’ said Agnes, shivering and stamping her cold feet – to – “If you say so.” Agnes shivered and stamped her cold feet. – Just a thought.

    Overall, I enjoyed the tale and found it quite humorous.

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    1. Thanks Russell, always like a bit of critique. I can see your point. My counter-argument would be a pet hate of stories of lots of dialogue that have no identifiers, which become confusing when it is not clear who is speaking any longer. Tends to happen in flash fiction as people try to save words. I think you’re right in this case though, it would still make sense without them. I’ve been over-cautious perhaps. Thanks for your thoughts.

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      1. I have read stories where it wasn’t clear who was speaking. With only two characters, you generally don’t need to use as many identifiers. It gets real tricky when there are three or more people involved in the scene.
        A tool I use to clarify who is speaking is to include action with the speaker’s name.

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  24. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover Avatar
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    Ah this reminds me of many childhood experiences of having to go back and retrieve lost wellies. Nice piece.

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    1. They do have a tendency to fall off – usually at the worst time 🙂

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  25. LOL. I can see that happening. He should have waited for the objections then listened to them but that would have nowhere near as fun.

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    1. Thanks Irene – exactly, life would be dull if we didn’t act impulsively sometimes.

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  26. I think he’s going to have a cold feet.
    (I have noticed that men do like to take some questionable shortcuts, would love to know why impulse wins out.)

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    1. Maybe the boyhood sense of adventure gets the better of us 🙂

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  27. They are so different yet so inseparable. Nicely written, Kelly.

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    1. Thanks Neel, they certainly are inseparable.

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  28. A bit of showing off? A bit of adventure? Dang losing those wellies. It’s going to be a long walk home. Good one!

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    1. Thanks Alicia – looking for adventure rather than showing off I think. He regrets it now anyway.

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  29. That was one unexpected reality check for him. 😉 Nicely done!

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  30. Maybe he should just give up and listen to Agnes. Like, always! 😀

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    1. He never does learn 🙂

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  31. Ha ha. I like Agnes 🙂

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    1. She has a definite cynical charm to her 🙂

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  32. Hehe! I lost a flip-flop in quicksand once and I had to flip-hop home!

    Click to read my FriFic!

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    1. Ha, you can sympathise with Archie’s predicament.

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  33. Lol. He got what was coming

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    1. It always seems to happen to him 🙂

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      1. Hell mend him xxxxxx
        Ps
        Seriously, he is wonderfully flawed .

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  34. Hahaha lost boots and pride I’m guessing! Good one Iain

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    1. Thanks Laurie, glad you liked it 🙂

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  35. That was far too close for comfort – I nearly lost my trainers in unexpected mud recently – a most unpleasant experience. And not at all ‘cosy’!

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    1. Thanks Liz, I’m glad it was ‘almost’, and you managed to retrieve them!

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  36. Oh, they seem to be quite a couple. I like Archie for his streak of adventure. Agnes seems to be a bit of a prude, is she? Haven’t read their other stories, so not quite sure.
    Loved this cute, understated tale with it’s line of humour.
    You know what, I see myself in Archie. 🙂
    Keep these coming, Iain.

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    1. Thank you Natasha – that’s what I like about Agnes and Archie – they are just an everyday couple, they could be any of us. So glad that comes across. Agnes can be a bit of prude, but other times she reveals a fun side too 🙂

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  37. Made me laugh out loud. My husband wants to know what’s so funny 🙂

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    1. Haha, glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  38. I was married to an “Archie”…

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    1. We all know at least one.

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  39. I get the feeling Agnes won’t let him forget that moment in their adventures to come.

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    1. Hopefully Archie will look back and laugh eventually too!

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  40. Agnes sounds like my kinda girl. Way-to-go-gurl!

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  41. Ha ha Some people are just destined to be daft but we love them for it

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    1. They do provide us with good story material!

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  42. LOL. What a twit he is! And I can just see her doing the superior snoot on him, as she walks off along the path.

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    1. Thanks Sarah, glad you liked it.

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  43. A great pair, these two. This story made me laugh. Good one!

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    1. Thanks Amie, glad you liked it 🙂

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  44. haha! if she’d been filming then maybe he could have bought new wellies from the £250 from You’ve Been Framed 🙂

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    1. Never mind that, Agnes would have it up on her Facebook straight away 🙂

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      1. Lol yep I’m showing my age there!

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  45. LOL. I think Agnes might be hard to please…

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    1. Archie certainly never seems to manage it!

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  46. Welcome to Turnagin Arm! Well done!

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