TICK-TOCK

‘Tick-tock, tick-tock,’ went the clock.

‘Time’s up! Time’s up!’ cried the People.

‘No more! No more!’ chanted the Poor.

Save me! Save me!’ weeped the Earth.

‘Me Too! Me Too!’ screamed the Victims.

Louder and louder the voices grew.

Higher and higher the echos reached.

Some of the Powerful fell on the sword of justice.

Some fell in the court of public opinion.

Most carried on. Making things Great.

And the Oppressed worked longer, for less.

The People survived as best they could.

Divisions grew. Polarity won over compromise.

While the clock carried on regardless.

Until it was the only sound left.

‘Tick-tock, tick-tock.’


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Copyright J Hardy Carroll

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

117 responses to “TICK-TOCK”

  1. A fable for our times. Iain. When is time up?

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    1. The clock knows, but its not telling.

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  2. Just brilliant! “Me too” screamed the victims. Clever. Excellent.

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    1. Thank you so much Jilly, very kind.

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  3. Dear Ian,

    I keep hearing, “time keeps on slipping, slipping, into the future…” Well written and thought provoking.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you Rochelle, the constant march of time no matter what else is happening is both comforting and scary.

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    2. Thanks for the earworm, Rochelle!!

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  4. Great commentary of our times (‘scuse the pun). Loved this!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  5. This is such food for thought. Well done Iain.

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  6. This is an excellent poem, Iain. Well done.

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    1. Thank you so much Roberta, much appreciated.

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  7. Reminds me a little of the late Harlan Ellison’s award winning short story “Repent, Harlequin!” Said the Ticktockman.

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    1. Thanks for the link James, not one I had heard of.

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  8. Ooooh well done! Nothing more needs said. Tick Tock!

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  9. Time is the great leveller. Big people, be it King or leader, everyone is equal before time.

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    1. Until someone cracks immortality.

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  10. This is so ominous 😦

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    1. Ominous times – what I was aiming for, thanks Sheena

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  11. I love the last few lines.

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  12. Something very different from you today Iain. It works very well. 🙂

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  13. Love this one. The clock is a wonderful piece of art too.

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    1. I see art in it too – hand-carved gem

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    2. Thank you Janet, glad you like it.

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  14. Our future? I sure hope not.

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    1. Our present certainly – how much longer have we got?

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  15. Hey, I thought this was Friday -Fiction-eers, where is the fiction in this? 😉

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  16. An acute observation of our times, loved it.

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  17. wonderful and sad – and such a flowing read with words that almost had a tick-tock banter the way your sentences were placed

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    1. Thank you, I was aiming for something like the tick-tock rhythm of the clock.

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  18. Brilliant, Iain. This is where we are. Where do we go? Time will tell.

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    1. Thank you. At the moment we still have a choice which way we go, but for how much longer before there is no turning back?

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  19. I like the way this starts as a nursery rhyme and finishes as a nightmare. The problem is easy to diagnose – lust for power, and greed – but infernally difficult to solve. Tick-tock.

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  20. Wonderfully written and very, very timely!

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    1. Thank you, much appreciated.

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  21. I wonder how many who can hear the clock ticking…

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    1. If you listen carefully, you can hear it…

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    The rhyme of this piece is like time itself,.

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    1. Thank you Michael, I was aiming for something like that.

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  23. I love the format of this. So many voices, so little time. Well done, Iain.

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  24. A powerful piece! Nicely done!

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  25. Just WOW! Let’s just frame it and circulate to the leaders of our world already!

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    1. Would they take any notice? One can only hope…

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  26. Wow, so deep! You have surmised the situation of this world and humans since the time unknown pretty well … The time moves on regardless of what goes on…

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    1. Thank you Anshu, it is reassuring that time marches on without a care for what we do!

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  27. Very thought-provoking. I love the style you’ve used.

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  28. Really good Iain and more proof of how versatile you are.

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    1. Thank you, too kind 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much Lore, very kind.

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  29. A change of style this week Iain. I could say ‘about time’ but that would be a pun too far!

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    1. So many things are ‘about time’, in so many ways. Thanks Keith.

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  30. A thought provoking poem penned. The Earth weeps and screams, “Save me, save me”, but Man is deaf. and Earth rolls and throws a catastrophe in the face of Man.

    https://ideasolsi65.blogspot.com/2018/09/uncertain.html

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    1. Thank you, we do seem to be heading towards some sort of disaster in many different ways!

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  31. Gosh well done
    I certainly hear that tick tock
    Time won’t stop and we are but a bleep

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  32. Can’t seem to put my fingers on to it, by why does this remind me of Pink Flyod’s, Division Bell. Love the cadence of this piece. And this hits the nail, and like how.

    Good to be back on your blog after eons, Iain. 🙂

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    1. Thank you Natasha, always good to hear from you 🙂

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  33. Well crafted. Such a serious piece but I don’t know why but it reminded me of the time when I used to read stories to my children 🙂

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    1. It does have that little fairy tale feel to it, though serious adult subject matter! Thank you

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  34. the oppressed worked longer for less sounds painfully familiar.

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    1. Glad I’m not alone 🙂

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  35. That’s a very haunting take on the prompt.

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  36. once again, a well-written piece that could only expected from you. 🙂

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  37. Excellent take on this prompt, Iain. Definitely not a fiction, this.. 😉 Not that there is anything wrong with that!

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    1. No, more a comment on the news I’m afraid!

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  38. Brilliant,Iain. I seem to be saying that a lot this week. So, either that clock made for a brilliant prompt or there’s something in the air.
    Your poem reminds me of a difficult situation we currently have in Federal politics here in Australia. We have a former Prime Minister Tony Abbott who has stayed on in Federal Parliament and keeps biting at the heels of the new PM. He is also an extremely conservative person whose values are out of step not only with the Australian people, but even his own electorate. I(t really has reached a point where we want him gone but we the people can’t get rid of him.
    Well, with pre-selection coming up for the next election, you would think he’d fail to get party endorsement at the branch level. Some local environmentalists even joined the local Liberal Party to vote against him. However, he stood unopposed although the disgruntled minority was noted. Oblivious to his opposition, Tony Abbott is determined to stay in public life and feels there’s still life in the old dog yet. It really stands to question just how democratic this country is. We’re clearly not alone either. I am not quite sure where my personal politics sits at the moment. Anarchy is looking attractive atm.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena
    https://www.theguardian.com/australia-news/2018/sep/15/tony-abbott-re-endorsed-as-liberal-candidate-for-warringah-despite-protest-vote

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    1. Thanks Rowena. We do get a bit of coverage of Australian politics over here, especially the latest PM change. In some ways it’s reassuring that Britain and America aren’t the only ones with politicians who seem incapable of doing their jobs properly. It does feel like there needs to be a clean sweep at the top before any decent amount of change will ever be achieved.

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      1. Yes, the federal politicians around the world are a real concern atm. I have started thinking more about getting more involved. I live in a swinging seat so my vote matters. However, these leadership spills have shown so much goes on behind the scenes at the branch level that it could well be important to be a part of it. I find our political parties hard to distinguish, which has made it difficult to choose and I don’t really have faith in either major party, although I think you really have to work within that system. I went to a disability meeting this morning hosted by our State member Liesl Tesch who is a Paralympic Gold medalist in sailing. She a real action woman and I am really behind her.
        Hope you’re having a great weekend. It’s warm and sunny here…a balmy Spring day.
        Best wishes,
        Rowena

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  39. Sad and true. The reality of our times. Nice poem.

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  40. A powerfully expressed poem, I really liked the writing and the message. There’s hope in in it. Well done.

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  41. I very much enjoyed your poetic prose. Excellently written. The content was a realistic commentary of the world today. There is no stopping time, but it’s what we do with it that matters.

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    1. Very true, although time will carry on regardless…

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  42. Wow! This is the wake up call for our times. Well done, Iain!

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  43. I think you just described the Doomsday Clock. Great work Iain.

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  44. There is so much included in this piece about the times we live in. Really well crafted.

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  45. this was brilliant. loved the build up and the short choppy lines. One of my favourites this week.

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    1. Thank you, much appreciated 🙂

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  46. Great pacing and build of tension. A parable for our times. Time will keep on ticking regardless.

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  47. What will keep the clocks ticking when they need rewinding? then complete silence except for what nature provides.

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    1. That’s the even more depressing sequel to my tale this week!

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