Iain Kelly

Fiction Writing

PERFECTION

Gustav sat on his foldout chair, staring at the carved tree trunk.

The gathered crowd waited for his next movement.

The Monterey Wood Carving Festival had finished two weeks ago. The other sculptures had since been removed. Gustav had become a local celebrity.

He would leave when he was sure it was finished.

He picked up his chisel. The murmuring crowd hushed. He chipped away a tiny splinter of wood.

He stepped back, tilted his head and smiled.

Now it is finished, he thought, and walked away.

Somewhere in the crowd a voice shouted, ‘What a load of rubbish.’

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Copyright JS Brand

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).

To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

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91 responses to “PERFECTION”

  1. Sandra Avatar
    Sandra

    Where there’s art there’s always a dissenter. Thankfully. Great story, Iain, you set the scene and the pace beautifully.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Sandra

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  2. jillyfunnell Avatar
    jillyfunnell

    That is so typical of life. You have encapsulated what we are all up against in a hundred words. And, of course, they do say a work of art is never finished.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      The trick is to finish it util you are happy and then walk away and leave it to others – not an easy thing to do.

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  3. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    There’s always someone who says it’s rubbish. And there’s always someone (usually your Mum) who says it’s genius. How’s a body to tell?

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Mum’s tend to be right about most things, so I value their opinion more…

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  4. ceayr Avatar
    ceayr

    Eric Morecambe lives!
    Good story about a place we’ve all been.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you CE, some more than others!

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  5. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Iain,

    A friend told me “haters are gonna hate.” It seems we went in similar directions this week. There’s a critic in every crowd…the negative voice of discouragement. Well done. Congrats and all the best on the novel.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Rochelle, we did indeed, perhaps it’s because I have sent my little novel out into the wide world and am waiting to see what the wide world thinks!

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  6. JS Brand Avatar
    JS Brand

    Poor old Gustav. At least he had loads more fans than critics. Nice tale Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you JS

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  7. Keith's Ramblings Avatar
    Keith’s Ramblings

    How unfair – it’s not total rubbish!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      You should be there to shout back so Gustav can hear you 🙂

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  8. joyroses13 Avatar
    joyroses13

    Well done to you with the story and to Gustav. Hopefully the “total rubbish” comment quickly leaves his brain as he listens to the voices that really matter!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I think the most important voice is his own, so long as he is happy with it, he can ignore what others think.

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      1. joyroses13 Avatar
        joyroses13

        Exactly!

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  9. neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS Avatar
    neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS

    Some act, others react. Very beautifully and succinctly illustrated. Good luck on your novel, LAIN.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Neel, do give it a look if you have time 🙂

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      1. neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS Avatar
        neeltheauthor- author of WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS

        I certainly would, Lain.

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  10. Edith M. Field Avatar
    Edith M. Field

    That last sentence came as such a shock! Such words can be so destructive because it’s impossible to ‘unhear’ them. The time that Gustav spent waiting and his smile when the work was completed to his satisfaction suggest that he may be able to disregard the ignorant statement of an unappreciative onlooker. I certainly hope so.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      He has a thick skin, if only we all could be so…

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  11. Susan A Eames Avatar
    Susan A Eames

    Hah! Now that reminded me of the Yahoo! comments – there’s always someone out there to shout things down. Nicely done, Iain.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      And really, did they need to do it? If you have nothing good to say, maybe it’s best to say nothing at all.

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  12. James Pyles Avatar
    James Pyles

    Ha! 😀

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I imagine you may have been the one to utter that last line, James 😉

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  13. Shweta Suresh Avatar
    Shweta Suresh

    There will always be someone who can’t truly appreciate the real beauty of something. And inside of admitting that, these people end up tarnishing it. It is unfair. But we can’t control what comes out of people’s mouth, especially if they are the kind who can’t appreciate art!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Very true, thanks for commenting Shweta

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      1. Shweta Suresh Avatar
        Shweta Suresh

        You’re very welcome, Iain!

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  14. michael1148humphris Avatar
    michael1148humphris

    Sorry Gustav, but I would prefer that you carved ice. 🙂 I think that we may need all the trees to regulate our climate

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Poor Gustav, another dissenting voice! 😉

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  15. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    Either it’s like the child saying that the emperor is naked or
    it’s just a dickhead who want to destroy the day of the artist.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I go with option B 🙂

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  16. plaridel Avatar
    plaridel

    it’s his work. as long as he’s happy with it, he doesn’t give a hoot about what other folks say. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I think Gustav has some thick skin 🙂

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  17. granonine Avatar
    granonine

    There’s at least one in every crowd. In this case, I wouldn’t have yelled out my opinion because I was raised to be polite. But I have to say that this poor tree just doesn’t speak to me 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Another knock for Gustav – he’s learning to deal with the critics! 😉

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  18. 4963andypop Avatar
    4963andypop

    Perhaps Gustav is a bit of a ham, and what he lacks in artistic skill he makes up for in showmanship. They will remember him because he stuck it out till it was perfect. And as for the critic…the worst thing you can do to anyone, these days, is to make them wait!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      That’s true, perhaps if he’d just finished on time it may have got a better response!

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  19. Russell Avatar
    Russell

    Don’t you just love it when people get in their heads what you should do, then talk junk when you do what you want to do instead of what they had imagined?

    Nice read!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Russell

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  20. Jade M. Wong Avatar
    Jade M. Wong

    Pffft oh my gosh, that ending dialogue! I suppose one man’s art is another man’s rubbish? Lol!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Well , it would be dull if we all saw things the same 🙂

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  21. Prior... Avatar
    Prior…

    Really like the way he finished with such attitude – and the crowd comment – abhhh
    We cannot please everyone – just can’t!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Best not to even try and please everyone

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      1. Prior... Avatar
        Prior…

        Well Said – but In
        Life we often forget
        Even a taco cannot please everyone
        I like the little meme going around: “I’m nkt for everyone “

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  22. syncwithdeep Avatar
    syncwithdeep

    some people hate to appreciate.. haters gonna hate always.. beautifully said Iain 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  23. draliman Avatar
    draliman

    Ha, after all that 🙂 I’m sure it was beautiful really, though.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      It was beautiful to Gustav at least.

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  24. JoHawkTheWriter Avatar
    JoHawkTheWriter

    Thick skin and the ability to shrug it off are hard skills to learn. Nicely written.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      It takes a lot of experience to be able to pick between constructive, good criticism and the comments to just ignore!

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      1. JoHawkTheWriter Avatar
        JoHawkTheWriter

        Well that is one comment I think I’d ignore 😉

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  25. Abhijit Ray Avatar
    Abhijit Ray

    Not many can appreciate an work of art. Poor Gustav!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Not Gustav’s anyway 🙂

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  26. liz young Avatar
    liz young

    An artist is never appreciated in his home town.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Or in his lifetime.

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  27. Russell Gayer Avatar
    Russell Gayer

    Probably the same critic who said Rochelle’s book was clunky. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      He gets around, doesn’t he?

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  28. Alicia Jamtaas Avatar
    Alicia Jamtaas

    I love how you built the anticipation of the crowd, the final stroke of the knife and the exhale. Then … the unpleasant comment. Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thanks Alicia 🙂

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  29. James McEwan Avatar
    James McEwan

    I had to laugh, art they say art is a mystical and personal taste. Nicely done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Glad it gave you a laugh James.

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  30. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Love it Iain. Perfection of course.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Laurie

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  31. magarisa Avatar
    magarisa

    Ouch! One can’t please everyone. Well done.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Ain’t that the truth. I have given up trying.

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  32. theministryofshrawleywalks Avatar
    theministryofshrawleywalks

    I love the Monterey Carving festival, I’m going to believe it exists and not google it, a brilliant take on the post

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      If it doesn’t exist, I think I shall start one, and it won’t even be in Monteray.

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  33. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    Love the way you paced this, Iain. And no, we can’t please everyone. One must take satisfaction in one’s work and if others appreciate it, then, cool…

    And, when I got home from my getaway, I had a package… Will be reading it shortly!!

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Dale, I shall remember your comment when I hear what you think of my novel! Really hope you like it and thank you so much for giving it a go 🙂

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      1. Dale Avatar
        Dale

        After reading Michael Wynn’s comment… I would not be overly worried were I you..

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  34. Woman walking Max Avatar
    Woman walking Max

    Beautifully crafted story, saying so much about celebrity, admiration, and envy. Like the way you build the scene, then ‘spike it’ in the last sentence.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  35. elappleby Avatar
    elappleby

    I loved the tiny alteration he made in the name of perfection, and then the last line made me laugh out loud. Great stuff.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you, glad it raised a laugh 🙂

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  36. Indira Avatar
    Indira

    Nice take. All artists have to be little thick skinned otherwise one cannot survive. You can’t please everyone.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Certainly can’t. Thank you.

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      1. Indira Avatar
        Indira

        🙂

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  37. subroto Avatar
    subroto

    Nice one. There is always a splinter movement where artists are concerned 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Haha 😉

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  38. jwdwrites Avatar
    jwdwrites

    This one tickled me, and quite a lot of other people judging by the other comments. Nicely done. 🙂

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you 🙂

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  39. lisarey1990 Avatar
    lisarey1990

    You captured this scene incredibly well Iain. Fantastic read.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Thank you Lisa

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  40. Dawn M. Miller Avatar
    Dawn M. Miller

    Everyone’s a critic! (lol)

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      Aren’t they just!

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  41. Fatima Fakier Avatar
    Fatima Fakier

    This echoes Rochelle’s take in a unique way. This is the reality though that we face as writers. And bring it on, I say! 🙂 Well done, Iain.

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      I like your attitude! 🙂

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  42. michaelwynnauthor Avatar
    michaelwynnauthor

    That last little splinter is all important, nothing is finished until the last little detail is complete

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    1. Iain Kelly Avatar
      Iain Kelly

      All important, as is knowing when to stop tinkering and be done with it!

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